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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 3 – Advanced)
Topic: Write in the ADVENTURE genre (05/24/07)

TITLE: A Good Night for Dying
By Larry Elliott


Well, I may be dying tonight after all.

Unless some unexpected miracle manifests itself out of the thin cool air. And soon.

Reality finally whacked me upside the head with the fact that the next few mouthfuls of air could very well indeed be my last on this planet.

My pursuer has been relentless, but surely even he would not carry this deadly game in here- a church building.

I should be safe, at least long enough to catch my breath and regain some tidbit of strength. Anyway, Iím pretty sure I threw him off my track a ways back. I just need to close my eyes for a minute or two then find a back way out of here.

The past few days have been insufferable. A friend, rather a professional acquaintance, let me know that some new guy had arrived to take my place and his first job was to take me out of the picture- permanently.

I thought I was good at what I do, but this guy is real good. He has somehow managed to survive or avoid all the traps my acquaintance and I set for him. Heís had some mighty good training from someone.

He has to have an accomplice, also.

Where is mine when I need him?

The thought has crossed my mind that maybe we were both relying on the same person for assistance. It would not be the first time it has happened. Though somehow I did not actually believe such was the case this time.

ďHey, old man, I know youíre in there. Come out come out where ever you are.Ē

Wha..? I donít believe it. He did follow. Ok, heart of mine, just ignore all of that adrenaline Iím force feeding you right now. Quiet down or your drum solo is going to lead him straight to us.

I am so weary I would not be much of an opponent right now. I need a safe place, a real safe place, to hide out for a couple of days.

At first I fought like a contender, but this new guy is strong, unnaturally strong.

Whatís worse is the big boss is behind this- and after all the years IíveÖ

ďAhaÖ there you are. Iíve got you now old man.Ē

Strong icy fingers find their way around my throatÖ crushing my windpipe. I canít breathe.

Oh no, water. Where did this water come from? No. No! Please Donít. Iím afraid of the waÖ I canít scream. My voice is blocked by the powerful grip. I canít seem to fight this guy off. All my struggling is fruitless. If I could justÖ

No please, donít shove my head under the water.

Heís going to drown me. If I could get one good kickÖ, itís no use.

Iím too weak.

Whose voice is that? I knew it. He does have a partner in crime.

ďI baptize you in the name of the Father, and of the Son and of the Holy Spirit.Ē


Well, I may be dying tonight after all.

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Dee Yoder 05/31/07
Dying to self? Or self dying? Clever!
Jacquelyn Horne06/01/07
Good point. Dying out to sin at baptisim. It was written with reality.
Jennifer Wetter06/02/07
Your title caught my attention. I wasn't sure what to expect but was completely suprised. I suppose I never really thought about it that way.
Leigh MacKelvey06/02/07
How original! I didn't get it until the end.( Making this is very good writing!)
Venice Kichura06/03/07
Very creative! I enjoyed this a lot.
Verna Cole Mitchell 06/03/07
Excellent allegory!
Sally Hanan06/07/07
Larry, I judged this week -- this one was so well written and I loved the allegory when I realized who was talking. Very creative.