The Official Writing Challenge
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06/01/07
This is very well written -- I could see everything happening. Personally, I don't like to read about savagery and blood. This was hard for me to get through because you painted such a realistic picture.
Beautiful imagery and detail.
06/04/07
That was one strong amazing opening and you never let up, excellent. This read like master's work to me!
06/05/07
Very vivid detail. I could picture it all. It read smoothly. Also loved your message about redemption and being set free. Good job!
I like how everything in your story pointed to your message.
06/06/07
Absolutely vivid and scary. You had me shaking.
Another story where the description and immediacy lend to great adventure. I'm glad you didn't shy away from the more painful aspects; in that way, I think, a story such as this gets inside the reader and really takes effect (whether they wish it to or not, I suppose).

Excellent writing, excellent job!
06/06/07
This is amazingly vivid. The kind of adventure that you read and stick with you, whether you really want it to or not. your descriptions were great and I especially liked the end with the message in the dirt. "I am free" Aren't we all? ^_^ Great writing, great job!
Wow! The description of Gareth was so vivid. I cringed at times because the pain was so real. Very powerful.
Excellent job; I especially loved the ending. Thank God for the freedom he gives us!
Deep, emotional story with a great pov.
06/07/07
***Congrats!***
06/12/07
Congratulations on your second place. I still don't like blood & guts stories -- see my comment above. :) But this is very well written, and a great adventure story.