The Official Writing Challenge
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Enjoyable read. Well written.
Good, realistic story. (I used to read those Choose Your Own Adventure books too!)
I loved those books! This was a good story. Although I can't think of any suggestions off hand, the beginning felt like it could use more showing than telling. Still, a good adventure!
Good detail, and great job keeping my attention.
Excellent adventure story beginning to end. I was glad for the rescue.
Wonderful way to have a literal interpretation of that old hymn become very real and meaningful.
How fun! I especially liked the paragraph with the choose your own adventure bit. Very nice humor there in the middle of something serious. I liked it, this was interesting and fun to read. Good job.