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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 3 – Advanced)
Topic: Write in the ADVENTURE genre (05/24/07)

TITLE: Alligators, Tarantulas, & Snakes, Oh My!
By Mo
05/30/07


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The Adventure Pet Zoo
by Hope Greenway


My best thing was the snake. I got to hold it all by myself -- with nobody helping me.

Daddy took pictures. Mommy sent the picture to everyone we know. She told her friend not to look at the picture if she didnít want to. Her friend is very afraid of snakes. I like snakes.

I want to go back to the Adventure Pet Zoo someday. It didnít take too long to get there. The big zoo takes longer.

We went there because they had ring tailed lemurs. We never saw a real one of those before. But we couldnít touch them. They werenít very nice.

Itís a small zoo. But we got to pet most of the animals, but not the ones who might bite us. Like the monkeys.

Someone from that zoo came to my school. Thatís how we found out about it. From the paper they gave us at school.

I got to touch a tarantula. My little brother didnít want to. I was very gentle. They told me to be. And I was.

The chinchilla was so soft. It was like touching air. It was fun to watch it take a dust bath. It swirls all around in a bowl of dust to fluff its fur back out.

They teach you stuff about the animals, too. Daddy says I need to learn to focus better. But he and Mommy get distracted sometimes, too.

The snake room was hot. We got sweaty. They had lots of snakes. One was almost as fat as a telephone pole. They rescued it from a family with little kids. They didnít even keep it in a cage. It has a big cage at the zoo.

And they rescued a huge tortoise from becoming turtle soup. It was very old, older than any person on Earth. I like planets, too.

We got to touch an alligator. They taped its mouth shut first. But they used tape that didnít bother its skin. It didnít seem too happy though.

Mommy only touched the bunny and the chinchilla. She kept telling us not to touch our faces after touching so many animals. She didnít want us to get sick.

We couldnít touch the crocodiles. They arenít as nice as alligators. They were in a different cage from the alligators. The boy said the alligators and crocodiles donít eat the turtles in their pool because they arenít hungry. They feed them good.

One old alligator was still small. Its owners didnít take good care of it. Heís getting better though. But heíll always be smaller than the other ones. Some people are like that, too. Daddy says everyone is different -- and special. God made us that way.

Why do people buy snakes and lizards and stuff if they donít want a huge pet? Donít they know how big it will get?

We donít have any pets. We had a dog, but it died.

Mommy didnít like the reptile room. She didnít like the poison toads either. We couldnít touch those. They were the biggest toads I ever saw.

Daddy liked the lizards. One of them can walk on water. I saw one do that in a movie once. But it isnít as heavy as Jesus.

My brother liked the giant rabbits best. He petted the wallaby, too. Its foot was hurt when it was a baby. Itís ok now though.

The rats were cute. The girl said the wild ones are dirty. She said itís not good to have wild ones in your house. They have lots of babies.

We have a mouse in our garage. We saw some in our yard, too. We named them Mousey and Micey.

Mommy says we should always stay away from wild animals. They might be sick. We donít want to get rabies or anything.

One day we drove by a raccoon behind a tree in the daytime. Raccoons are nocturnal. That means theyíre usually out at night. Maybe it was sick.

The boy said never to trust wild animals. He doesnít even trust the ones heís known since they were babies.

I like zoos. I like animals. God created them all. And someone has to take care of them.

I used to want to be a vet and a doctor and a ballerina when I grew up. Then I wanted to be a grandma and a teacher. But maybe I will be a zookeeper, too.


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Sheri Gordon05/31/07
This is really cute. Would be a wonderful children's story -- bummer it's a week too soon. :)

I love the POV -- it's a great adventure from the little girl's perspective. Nice job.
Janice Fitzpatrick06/04/07
Very cute!Love how this is seen through a child's eyes. Oh, if we could only see more through the eyes of the innocent. Keep up the writing. Nice job! God bless your talent.Janice
Verna Cole Mitchell 06/04/07
This so sounds like a little girl. You captured the voice exactly...or did you overhear it!
Julie Arduini06/04/07
This is great! You captured the POV and told a delightful story.
Marty Wellington 06/07/07
Very nicely done from the child's perspective. A thoroughly enjoyable read.