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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 3 – Advanced)
Topic: Write in the ADVENTURE genre (05/24/07)

TITLE: Daisy's Quest
By Beth LaBuff
05/29/07


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On the south side of McDaniel’s farm
Amidst the muck and slop,
Resided Daisy Hog, nee Pig
With swine-mates Ham and Chop.

Now Daisy Hog once overheard
Some town folks’ conversation
‘Bout how pigs are malodorous
With need for air filtration.

Daisy wished to modify the
Olfactory perceptions
Of city slickers near her sty
And wipe out preconceptions.

And with this new capricious thought
‘Bout not assaulting noses,
Daisy had a keen desire
To smell like fragrant roses.

She hopped in Old McDaniel’s truck.
To make her visage clean,
She headed to a laundromat
To find a wash machine.

She saw her chance and jumped into
A washer with a sheet.
Added bleach enough to well-nigh
Pickle Hog’s pig feet.

Then in a dryer set to “high”
She tumbled and was shaken.
Daisy steamed in heat extreme --
It pert’ near fried her bacon.

Now clean as any Hog e’er was
Or ever hoped to be,
Daisy hoofed on over to
The town’s perfumery.

And with a newfound confidence
She posed as a consumer,
“I’d like to try your best cologne,”
She oinked to the perfumer.

The clerk looked straight in Hog’s pig eye,
Brought forth “Essence of Rose”,
Dabbed the scent high on the Hog
And some between her toes.

Daisy returned back to the farm
And greeted Ham and Chop.
Ham commenced a sneezing fit
From which he couldn’t stop.

‘Twas Daisy’s highfalutin’ scent
That started Ham a sneezin’.
Apparently an allergy
To roses was the reason.

Daisy perceived and finally chose
To end this masquerade.
And with each dip into the mud
Rose scent began to fade.

And as a sow that once was washed
To wallow had returned,
To be just who she was before --
This lesson, she had learned.


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Misti Chancellor06/01/07
What an entertaining way to illustrate 2 Peter 2:22 (the sow returning to her wallowing in the mire after she has been washed)! Fun!
Donna Howard06/03/07
This is hilarious! Simply delightful. What an interesting way to handle the Challenge. I enjoyed the whole thing, but especially the two lines "Daisy steamed in heat extreme -- It pert' near fried her bacon." Thanks for my laugh for the day. Great job!
Kenn Allan06/04/07
What fun! This could easily be a children's book.
dub W06/04/07
Easily could be illustrated...and should be, I agree with above, belongs in a children's book.
Joanne Sher 06/04/07
Just delightful and fun. I agree - this is a children's book begging to happen! Excellent.
Sally Hanan06/08/07
Beth, I judged for this week's theme, and found your entry to be highly entertaining and creative. I agree with the others -- you should seriously consider sending out a few queries to have this published as a book. I'd recommend getting help from those on the boards with the query letter if you haven't done that before.
06/09/07
Beth, I agree with those who said this poem should be made into a book. You could develop it further, add illustrations, etc. But one word of caution - since this is a children's story, maybe you should put a footnote on it that animals can't REALLY be put into washers and dryers. I have heard of children trying. This is just a "joke" suggestion. Your poem was very entertaining and funny. I followed "Sow" all the way in her adventures, but was glad she realized she was a pig and wanted to remain that. Good lesson.
Janice Fitzpatrick06/11/07
Oh how I love this one hon. Amazing flow and had me in stitches. You are quite the humourous poet my dear. God bless your gift. Wow. I was just glad that the character didn't get fried or smoked. Yes, this cold make a children's book indeed. :0) Janice
Lisa Holloway06/11/07
This was such a creative idea and very entertaining! The poem has a good rhythm, too. Nice job.