The Official Writing Challenge
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What a fun poem. Love the last line, too.
Loved the style of this, very fun, and would make a great children's book!
Ok, so I'm still laughing.
This was great.

Thanks, and God bless,

Kevin
05/24/07
So refreshingly fun and funny! (and really, really very good)

Loed the last line too! What a hoot!
Where's the picnic? All you needed was a checkered blanket,lol. Man, here I am scratching and squrmjkng myself. Nice job, what a hoot! Pat's right, the last line is great.grin. Love it! Keep up the writing...but please, no more BUGS!EEEEEEEKKK.:0) ROFL
05/24/07
Very creative. You need to get it illustrated!
I think this would delight children from every country. Absolutely charming!
05/24/07
rofl .... this is too clever! I can see this illustrated and on my kids shelf. Great job!
05/25/07
Cute, fun, and the most perfect ending! RAID! I enjoyed your bugs! But mostly the Raid. LOL!
This is really cute. And well written. A surprise at the end.
Could it be great imagery, or am I just itching all over for nothing!
The cadence for this piece left me with a picture of kids marching around a camp ground and singing your poem.
Very enjoyable.
05/27/07
EEEWWWW!! Give me the creepy crawlys.

Great work.
Ha! That's cute. I love the ending. I feel better with Raid myself. Awesome work.
Well done! You should submit this as a childen's picture book.
LOL - I think even Dr. Seuss would smile at this one!
05/29/07
Ew ew ew ew ew! I'm a bug-phobic person, so I'm feeling a tad creeped out right now...but seriously, this is delightful. Ew.
05/29/07
This is hysterical. I'd keep a good grip on that Raid if I were you. Great job! Blessings, Teri
05/30/07
How fun. A delightful read.
05/30/07
Lots of fun. Love the last line. Thanks for sharing it
05/30/07
This would make a great little book for kids! I can even see all the pictures for it. :-)
05/30/07
I agree - this is a children's book WAITING to happen (stop by Zondervan, girl!). I probably had as much fun reading this as you did writing it. I laughed like crazy, especially with that last line.
05/30/07
Oh, Thank you!! I needed that laugh! So fun! :-)
05/30/07
Delightful and fun!
05/31/07
Congratulation dear friend Lynda. Of course a poem about bugs wopuld make it! (by you!)

I think the last line clinched it for you. ;)

Enjoy dear friend. Love,
Pat
This is so totally a Lynda entry! Congrats on the win--great job!
05/31/07
Congratulations. This is wonderful. I have the creepy crawlies all over me. Such a fun read.
What a great poem.
I can imagine this as a fantastic book, with really bright colors of large animated bugs, being read to a group of kindergarten children squealing with delight. Loved it.