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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 3 – Advanced)
Topic: Write in the POETRY genre (05/17/07)

TITLE: Heaven's Tears
By Amy Michelle Wiley
05/23/07


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I
raise my
hands up high
my face is kissed
with moisture
                                                                        from the
                                 A                                        sky
                            drop falls
                          landing nigh
                       a glistening tear                                                                                     The
                         that fell from                                                                                  gentle wind
                            heaven's                                                                                   a passing sigh
                               eye                                                                                     unable to answer
                                                                                                                             the question
                                                                                                                               my soul's
                                                                                         The                                  "why?"
                                                                                 wetness drapes
                                                                               my heartís own lie
                                                                         and binds it to the ground
                                                                              I fall upon my knees
                                                                                and bid my hope
                 Yet                                                                goodbye
          something deep
        refuses to comply
     I raise my head to hills
          that arch atop
           my head so                                 A
                high                                flicker from
                                                  the birds that fly
                                             above on gilded wings
                                                brings the thought
                                                      that still I                                                  A
                                                       want to                                              ray peeks
                                                          try                                              like faith so shy
                                                                                                     to warm my aching heart
                                                                                                         as glimmer spreads
                                                                                                            and wet cheeks
                                                                                                                    dry


A whisper comes                                                                    and know
                       like gentle mist                       "my child, be still           I am always near"
                                             to fall upon my ear

        When torrents pour
                                with lightning pain                      the still soft voice
                                                          until I cannot see                      will touch my heart
                                                                                                                                "Child, look to Me"

                          and questions call
Still darkness blinds                    and teardrops come          but in the quiet
                                                                            like rain                 of my soul
                                                                                                                     He's waiting
                                                                                                                                   through the pain
          I find the strength
                                   to lift my head          up to the light
                                                      and look                   and though around
                                                                                                              the storm goes on

just one thing fills my sight

A Father smiles
                   and holds out a hand                      the storm
                                                to lift me through          and then I know                my faith has
                                                                                                       that I can trust             been reborn

                                     His tear upon my cheek
                           and feel                               no matter where
  I spread my arms                                                               no matter what
                                                                                                               He is the one
                                     And so I bow                                                                          I seek
                                                      before the throne
                                                                              wherein dwells the Lamb

                                                  and it's enough
                                                                      to understand

He is

The Great

I AM



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Anna Johnson05/24/07
This is a very lovely poem and very cleverly done. Nice job and, touching and very creative.
Janice Fitzpatrick05/24/07
Awesome! I love how you did your poetry in an artistic pattern, appealing and dramatic to the eye and the words rhthymic and powerful!Love this! Keep it up! Great job! God bless your gift!Janice
Dixie Phillips 05/24/07
Loved how it looked like teardrops. Especially enjoyed the ending......I AM... POWERFUL!
Maxx .05/24/07
you win the creativity award! very clever!
Sharlyn Guthrie05/24/07
I love the visual effect that supports your wonderful message. Very very well-done.
Kenn Allan05/25/07
I LOVE the formatting - it truly enhances the reading experience. An' the poem ain't bad either... *applause*
Loren T. Lowery05/25/07
The formatting and the message are captivating.
David Butler 05/25/07
Wow! This adds new meaning to the expression "Word-painting". Must have taken a lot of work to get the line placings right. If this doesn't place, I'll be very surprised.
Rhonda Clark 05/26/07
This is great. The layout very unique, but easy to navigate. Wonderful.
Jacquelyn Horne05/27/07
Nice layout here. Just like a gentle rain. Good job.
Henry Clemmons05/28/07
Smart. Very nice.
Debbie OConnor05/28/07
Beautiful poem in a very unique presentation. That must have taken you a very long time. Great job!
Venice Kichura05/28/07
This is one of the most creative entries I've ever read! WOW!
Jan Ackerson 05/28/07
WOW! This is spectacular!
Benjamin Graber05/29/07
Excellent poem, both in creative and inspirational quality. My heart was touched by this one!
Verna Cole Mitchell 05/29/07
Excellent poetry and a wonderful message uniquely presented!
Dara Sorensen05/29/07
I liked this one and the imagery. However, don't hate me for this--but I must be the only one who found it a bit difficult to read :-P I must just be overly traditional, lol. Anyway, that was the only critique I had, though I believe I may be the only one who thought that :-)
william price05/29/07
Great design, GREATER poem. God bless.
Caitlynn Lowe05/29/07
Good job; overall, I like the poem. Maybe it's just a family thing, but I'm not too crazy about the setup either. It's a good enough poem to stand on its own, and the extra pizazz was a bit distracting for me at first. Overall a good poem, though. :)
Catrina Bradley 05/29/07
I love the poem behind the fabulous formatting design. Personally, I found the design fought with the beautiful message of poem and distracted me from enjoying it as much as I could have. Or maybe I needed to go slower. :) Your heart came through and touched me - I'm saving this to print and savor!
Cassie Memmer05/29/07
Nice message but the format did keep me from grasping the depth of the poetry. I'm too lazy to have to work at reading. :) But I do acknowledge the work you put into it. You set a difficult goal and worked it out. Good job!
Rita Garcia05/30/07
Absolutely Wonderful in every way!!!
Joanne Sher 05/30/07
Beautifully written - Deb's gonna KILL you if this makes the EC! ;) A wonderful message and a lovely poem, though I have to agree that the formatting was a bit distracting. Way to stretch!
Donna Emery05/30/07
the format is unique. This brings "word pictures" to a whole new dimension. Well done. Thanks for sharing it
TJ Nickel05/30/07
The format was great for me as a reader until just at the end when it switched up to streams vs. left to right, but then I caught it and liked it still. Great creativity. I know from experience that this type of formatting isn't easy to pull off. More than the formatting, great writing, especially the ending.
dub W05/30/07
Shaped poetry is always fun to read, you have done a masterful job of creating this project.
Lauren Bombardier05/30/07
I had to laugh at what Joanne said, because I remember you said the exact same thing while you were writing it.

I still love it. :D
LaNaye Perkins05/30/07
Great in word and appearance! I love how you brought this poem together. Great work!
Lynda Lee Schab 05/31/07
And you say you don't like poetry...ha! You'd never know it from this piece. Wonderfully creative, beautiful poem. Well done!