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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 3 – Advanced)
Topic: Write in the POETRY genre (05/17/07)

TITLE: Infra-Red
By David (The Goliath Assassin)
05/22/07


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Keepin’ up with the fact’ry bustle and the
Side hustle is runnin’ me ragged.
I barely have a moment to unwind.

A wound’s bleeding in my soul and a good
Meal would make me whole.
But I push it all aside. I ain’t got the time.

My life is filled with deadlines.
I can’t resent them ‘cause they’re all mine.
I can’t stop until I reach the next plateau.

My engine’s feeding on my frustration
About my education on the state of our nation.
But all I really want is to take it slow.

And all I see is Red… And all I see is Red…
And all I see is Red… And all I see is Red…

My heart’s been broken and the keys all stolen
But I always keep a spare right here.
‘nd my heart still burns like a Solar Flare.

You can’t keep a strong man down.
It’s just something I have found.
And I’ve looked for signs of scars, but they’re not there.

I agree with God, I won’t be right
Until I’m spending all my nights
As a human heater for the warmth-impaired.

Sure, it’s a seasonal job
Push me away if you get hot.
When I wake, I’ll see you glow like the sun runnin’ through your hair.

And all I see is Red… And all I see is Red…
And all I see is Red… And all I see is Red…


My passion, it defines me
Whatever the occasion be.
Just know that I am giving it my all.

I’ll fight ‘till I’m on the floor.
Love like I’ve never been hurt before.
I just need someone to catch me should I fall.

I don’t like to ask for help.
I can’t do this all myself
But I’m just that brave and dumb to want to try.

I’ve got my bow in hand and
A straight shot, just understand
How useful we could be at each other’s side.

And all I see is Red… And all I see is Red…
And all I see is Red… And all I see is Red…

It’s like infra-Red... It’s like infra-Red…
It’s like infra-Red… It’s like infra-RED!


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Jacquelyn Horne05/24/07
This left me a little confused. It's very good, but somehow I missed the point of "all I see is red". Since I don't know a lot about poetry, others will probably relate much better. However, I really enjoyed it with that one exception.
Joyce Poet05/24/07
Very cool lines: "I don’t like to ask for help.
I can’t do this all myself
But I’m just that brave and dumb to want to try."
I thoroughly enjoyed!
Rhonda Clark 05/25/07
The flow is good, but I didn't get it. I'm not into poetry, so it could be me.
Marilyn Schnepp 05/25/07
Good try! I guess I'm a little dense, 'cause I never got the point. Not the author's fault...it's mine.
Sharlyn Guthrie 05/28/07
I like the voice of this poem and I definitely appreciate your transparency.
Benjamin Graber05/30/07
This would make a great song! I enjoyed this one; good job.


   
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