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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 3 – Advanced)
Topic: Write in the POETRY genre (05/17/07)

TITLE: Curves
By Maxx .
05/22/07


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The clouds wispy, soft, like red and gold accents on a master painting
Your eyes bright, excited
The setting sun blazing behind mountains newly freed by spring
The curve of your palm as I take your hand,
Our first date
Memories of an unexpected introduction

The steeple bells peeling through a shower of rice
Your eyes eager, alive
Candlelight glinting off pearls woven into your gown, soon crumpled on the floor
The curve of your bare hip as my finger traces your body,
Our first night
Images from a day of wonder

The whispers of an intercom soothing a ceiling of surgical green
Your eyes wide, uncertain
The glow of the fetal monitor as it flashes in the predawn gray
The curve of your womb as our future stretches and kicks,
Our first child
Seeds of our hope-filled expectations

The strobe of red and blue crashing against withering leaves
Your eyes fixated, horrified
The body of our only son near his crumpled bike
The curve of your arms as you helplessly cradle him,
Our first loss
Shards of a dream broken

The relentless slicing of the vaulted fan in a noiseless room
Your eyes swollen, red
My reflection in the darkened window, shallow, lifeless
The curve of your tears as they track pallid cheeks,
The first time I didnít care anymore
Splinters of a shattered promise

The disparaging midnight wind, the frozen clawing of skeletal branches
My eyes thick, unblinking
The sound of your distant car motor still searing my interminable consciousness
The indented curve of the now vacant mattress that weíd once shared,
Our first leaving
Fragments of a failure complete

The shadowed archways, the luminous stained glass
My eyes stinging, searching
The long-forgotten scent of pews and candles
The curve of my stooped shoulders as I crumble at the alter,
My first humbling
Kernels of a desperate healing


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Sally Hanan05/24/07
Beautifully written and hopeful, depite all of the pain.
Dixie Phillips 05/24/07
OH MY GOODNESS!!!! I had to read this through several times to be sure I didn't miss a single bite. This is absolutely POWERFUL..... The "Curve" element was a stroke of genius. I just loved this... and especially the kernel of healing at the end. Loved how you ended with HOPE.....
Sharlyn Guthrie05/24/07
Beautifully written, but heartbreaking as well. I, too, am glad for the glimmer of hope at the end. Great job.
Catrina Bradley 05/24/07
Wow.
Jacquelyn Horne05/25/07
Oh, how deep and passionate! Very good, though sad.
Verna Cole Mitchell 05/25/07
A powerfully emotional poem!
Rhonda Clark 05/26/07
Woah! Had to fan myself there a few times. :) Then, I wasn't sure where it was going. ;)

Very, very touching, and humbling. Filled with lots of emotion. Love it.
Lynda Lee Schab 05/28/07
This poem made me smile, gave me chills, and broke my heart...and all within such a brief piece! Very intense, beautiful writing. Every word and line was wonderfully crafted. Loved it.
Debbie OConnor05/28/07
Like...wow.

Maxx, you are a poet and this is amazing. Great imagery, your rhythm was perfect. Absolutely wonderful.
Henry Clemmons05/28/07
Nice images. Good flow. Great job
Pat Guy 05/28/07
I had to read this twice to remember where I stumbled just a tad ...I was so engrosed in the flow of its tragic beauty.

This is the place I found - "The sound of your distant car motor still searing my interminable consciousness"

It's a poem not easily forgotten ... awesome.

Betty Castleberry05/28/07
For me, a poem has to touch some emotion in me. This one touched many. I don't often re-read entries, but I did this one. Excellent.
Dee Yoder 05/28/07
Beautiful, bittersweet story; beautiful redemption and hope in your poem. I enjoyed reading it.
Benjamin Graber05/29/07
Wow, amazing poem with powerful images, both sweet and sad. Excellent job!
Joanne Sher 05/30/07
Wow - I echo what everyone else has said. Wow
Amy Michelle Wiley 05/30/07
Powerful with a bright glimmer of hope at the end.
Loren T. Lowery05/30/07
This is breathtakingly sobering. Sometimes, when re-reading a favorite book and I know a critical bad choice is about to be made by one of the characters, I want to cry out, "No. Stop."
But that never helps, the story continues as the author intended. Sometimes the story ends with tragedy, sometimes with triumph, sometimes (as yours) with hope. Few pieces affect me the way your poem has - all I can add to the kudos above is, well done!
Rita Garcia05/30/07
This will long resonate in my heart. Your gift once again shines!
dub W05/30/07
Interesting and powerful verse, I have to read it a couple of more times to figure out if I like it. :)
Patty Wysong05/30/07
wow. powerful. moving. hope at the end. wow.
william price05/30/07
Very visual and entertaining. Very good. God bless.
Teri Wilson05/30/07
Oh my gosh, I LOOOOVE it. This is incredible.
T. F. Chezum05/31/07
Very well done. I like the flow and the imagery of this piece.
Pam Carlson-Hetland05/31/07
Absolutely incredible.
Janice Fitzpatrick05/31/07
WOW! Amazing description and intensity, kept me reading on thinking what next, what chapter of life are they facing now?Beautifully arranged!From sweet romantic and tender memories to ones of tragedy and sorrow. I like how you wove hope in the last verses, truly brought a curve to my lips. My hats off to you for accomplishing such a masterpiece as far as I am concerned.:0)God bless you and your gifts.Keep up the great work!!:0) Janice
Pat Guy 05/31/07
Congratulations Maxx - welcome back and stick around for awhile - okay?

Hauntingly beautiful.

Enjoy it my friend.

Love,
Pat
Sheri Gordon05/31/07
This is incredible. It touched me to the very core. Major goosebumps.

(I love the line about the wedding dress -- brilliant imagery.)

Congratulations, and wonderful poem.
Suzanne R06/02/07
Beautiful imagery and your choice of words is pure art. Congratulations, too, on a well-earned win!
Pamela Kliewer06/02/07
Wow! This is powerful. I echo everyone else's comments. Congrats on your win!

Jan Ross06/02/07
This took my breath away -- literally. I'm trying to eat a quick sandwhich and read and suddenly found myself unable to breathe! Absoluely incredibly amazingly awesome! Wow!
Brenda Welc06/04/07
Just invision me with my jaw wide open! This was absolutly wonderful. Such a great collection of magical useful descriptive words. you should be very proud of what you wrote here. I bow........
Eunice Matchett06/05/07
this is so good, Maxx. Your imagery and emotion provoking is fantastic. blessings, e