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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 3 – Advanced)
Topic: Write in the POETRY genre (05/17/07)

TITLE: Awaken My Senses
By Sharlyn Guthrie
05/22/07


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Your fragrance is the very air I breathe,
O my God,
Emanating from Your being
An aroma sweet and pure
Like baking bread,
Aloe,
Lilacs,
Lavender,
And myrrh;
O my God,
Let Your sweet aroma fill me.

Your beauty is delightfully revealed,
O my God,
Radiating from Your presence
An awesome, glorious sight
Like rare gemstones,
Rainbows,
Fire,
Angel wings,
And light;
O my God,
Let Your lovely vision thrill me.

Your melody is soothing to my ears,
O my God,
Sung in quiet strains accompanied
By the music of the earth
Like gurgling brooks,
Locust,
Bullfrogs,
Ocean waves,
And mirth;
O my God,
Let Your comforting voice still me.

Your taste is sweeter to my mouth than wine,
O my God,
Springing from an endless fountain
So my hungry soul is fed
With honey, milk,
Manna,
Water,
Vegetables,
And bread;
O my God,
Let Your living food instill me.

Your touch incites a longing in my breast,
O my God,
Everlasting arms enfold me;
They’re my solace and my peace
Like warmth of sun,
Babies,
Blankets,
Rose petals,
And fleece;
O my God,
Let Your loving touch fulfill me.

Shake my senses from their long-extended sleep,
O my God,
Train them how to recognize You;
Let me learn of You so much
By Your fragrance,
Beauty,
Flavor,
Speaking voice,
And touch;
O my God,
Send Your Spirit now to will me.


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Julie Arduini05/24/07
Well done, my senses are alive given the great fragrances and descriptions here.
Jacquelyn Horne05/25/07
Wonderful love story. Reads a lot like the Song of Solomon.
Marilyn Schnepp 05/25/07
A modern day Psalm came to mind as I read this piece. Not rhythmic poetry per se, but written in the style of a Psalm. Nicely done. Excellent message.
Mo 05/25/07
Very nice!
Rhonda Clark05/25/07
I like your incorporation of all the senses. Wonderful.
Verna Cole Mitchell 05/26/07
Indeed, you completely excellently the prayer of your title. I love the imagery.
Joanne Sher 05/26/07
Love the imagery and the structure of this. You convey so wonderfully the depth of your love for Him. Perfect title for this lovely piece.
Marilee Alvey05/28/07
Wow! This is picture perfect. Who couldn't understand your relationship to your Creator with such vivid word pictures? Why, this is almost scratch and sniff! It's a VERY remarkable poem. Well done.
Sharon Henderson05/28/07
My kind of poetry. Nice flow, good rhythm. Wonderful pictures.
Jan Ackerson 05/28/07
So many beautiful images here, but my favorite phrase was "train them to recognize You"...because it's so easy to take all this glory for granted. Wonderful food for thought.
Betty Castleberry05/29/07
Before I looked at the other comments, I, too, thought this read like a psalm. It's lovely and meaningful. Very well done.
Benjamin Graber05/30/07
What a neat poem! I really like how you go through each of the senses, exploring the delights and needs of each.
Trevas Walker05/30/07
I really like the style that you used. Great poem, I enjoyed reading it.
Rita Garcia05/30/07
"Awaken My Senses" -- you certainly did just that! Music to my heart!
william price05/30/07
Super reader involvment. Very nice job. God bless.
Jan Ackerson 07/16/07
Sharlyn, I've come back to this wonderful poem in my search for pieces to use for the Front Page Showcase. I'll be using it on the week of August 20th. Look for it on the FW home page.
Joanne Sher 08/20/07
This is so amazingly vivid and moving, my friend! So glad I got a reminder to read it again. Congrats on your showcase placement.
Anne Linington08/20/07
Because this poem is so wonderful, I would like to be really picky in order to improve it even further. But I know God will use it just as it is. E-mail me a copy to Anne.linington@tiscali.co.uk if I can be of help.
Janice Cartwright08/20/07
I love both the rhythmic cadence and worshipful feel of your poem.
Rita Garcia08/23/07
Congratulations! I am so happy to see this beautiful poem being showcased! I loved the chance to read it again!
Robert Ruane08/24/07
This was well written with a lot of vivid images.