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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 3 – Advanced)
Topic: Write in the POETRY genre (05/17/07)

TITLE: Dawning Light
By Myrna Noyes
05/22/07


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Desperate darkness, oh so deep
No glimpse of light can mankind see
In great despair they moan and weep
Who will arise and set us free?

A people blind in heart and mind
Stumbling as they seek their way
Hoping an escape to find
Out to the blessed dawn of day

Into a sin-black world streams light
Piercing shadows with bright beams
Clear morning edges out the night
With shining rays and golden gleams

Scales excised from sightless eyes
As holy radiance grows and glows
In its strength destroying lies
While truth and right it clearly shows

Flowing out through all vast space
Free to one and all the same
Reaching my own time and place
Igniting my heart with its flame

Lord Jesus is our heavenly light
A lamp for sore and trembling feet
Putting sin and shame to flight
Pledge of eternity so sweet

Hosannas now we shout and sing
Glory to the spotless Lamb
Lord of Lords and King of Kings
Morning Star and Great I Am



“The people living in darkness have seen a great light; on those living in the land of the shadow of death a light has dawned.” Matthew 4:16 & Isaiah 9:2


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Loren T. Lowery05/24/07
A lot of good stanzas here, but my favorite and one that (for me)sums up your wonderful message, "Clear morning edges out the night..."

How lucky we are for this truth as well as for writers who can so poeticaly express this enlightening news.
Julie Arduini05/24/07
Great writing here! You brought a great message wrapped in a beautiful poem.
Jacquelyn Horne05/26/07
This is good. There's a conflict in person here. You might want to change "they moan and weep" to "we moan and weep" and "Stumbling as they seek their way" to "Stumbling as we seek our way". I know this is minor, but, I think it would flow better with these changes. This is such a good poem, it deserves the best. Good job.
Myrna Noyes05/26/07
Just to clarify...! I did originally have "WE moan and weep," etc., but I wanted to show that it was humanity as a whole BEFORE Christ came to this earth as the Light of the World that were in great darkness as the Bible verse says. Later in the poem I say that the light has reached "my time and place" and touched my life, too. I hope that explains why I made the change. Blessings, Myrna Joy
Cathy Kane05/26/07
Absolutely beautiful! So inspirational. Made me want to shout hosannas as well. This poem made me glad to be a Christian. Truly excellent work. Thank you. You blessed my day.
Rhonda Clark 05/28/07
Great tribute to God. Wonderful work.
Marilee Alvey05/29/07
What a wonderful expression of Jesus, the light of the World. Just today, our Sunday School class was discussing how we are like a flock of sheep, aimlessly trying to find our way. That's what I felt at the beginning of your poem. Our leader asked what we thought it would be like if Jesus wasn't present in our world today. You show that, without him, we are aimlessly walking in the darkness. Our Shepherd brings the light of day to us. Thank you for your vivid description of the light He alone brings to a fallen world. Excellent message, here!
Jan Ackerson 05/29/07
Nice, this one almost sings!

I'm not sure about the line "A lamp for sore and trembling feet." Do sore feet need a lamp?

Consider finding someone to set this to music; it'd make a lovely chorus.
Benjamin Graber05/29/07
I like the progression in this poem from night to day. I must admit, though, that last stanza sounded too much like cliche to me, especially since the lamb / I Am rhyme is used so often in Christian poetry.
Keep up the good work!