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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 3 – Advanced)
Topic: Write in the POETRY genre (05/17/07)

TITLE: Faint Echoes of Their Moonlit Cries
By Caitlynn Lowe
05/21/07


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Come read the tale, long forgotten,
Of star-crossed love, both pure and strong.
None recall how ‘twas begotten
Nor when the romance did go wrong.
Yet few, however, shall forget:
Faint echoes of their moonlit cries
Heard ringing in the winter skies.

A maiden of a wingéd race,
A young prince who dwelled in the sea,
Two sweethearts with no meeting place;
This love and pain their destiny.
So hearken and do not forget:
Faint echoes of their moonlit cries
Heard ringing in the winter skies.

Then one night a plea was spoken—
Two hearts, one prayer, one starry dream
For unseen chains to be broken,
And love’s soft spark be lit agleam.
But mid their wish we can’t forget:
Faint echoes of their moonlit cries
Heard ringing in the winter skies.

In answer to their lonely bid
A freezing breeze took o’er the spot,
Making that which was once forbid
Iced over in one simple shot.
Winter starlight makes one forget:
Faint echoes of their moonlit cries
Heard ringing in the winter skies.

Upon the platform they embraced,
But their delight was soon cut short.
Scattered feathers, hopes laid to waste—
Their bliss jealous rivals did thwart.
‘Twas then it happened, none forget:
Faint echoes of their moonlit cries
Heard ringing in the winter skies.

As she lie dying in his grip,
One final miracle ensued.
The ice encased this final snip
Of their love’s tale, forever viewed.
All done so none would dare forget:
Faint echoes of their moonlit cries
Heard ringing in the winter skies.

“Could this be true?” I hear you ask.
On that matter I’ll stay silent.
Instead, in winter’s starlight bask—
Their true love still bears testament.
Be soundless and you shan’t forget:
Faint echoes of their moonlit cries
Heard ringing in the winter skies.


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Julie Arduini05/24/07
This reads like Shakespeare! How haunting, and what a romantic read. Amazing.
Sharlyn Guthrie05/25/07
Haunting! I like the voice and the lilting rhythm of this poem. Very nice.
Rhonda Clark 05/26/07
I agree with the Shakespeare comment. Good work. I could never come up with something like this.
Jan Ackerson 05/28/07
Wonderful job with the structure of this fable-poem!
Jan Ackerson 05/28/07
Wonderful job with the structure of this fable-poem!
Jacquelyn Horne05/29/07
The word play here is very strong. But somehow I don't quite understand. Maybe this is a rendition of a story I'm not familiar with. But the writing is very strong here, and others may already know the tale. Good job.
Dara Sorensen05/29/07
Ilike it--very creative story that you came up with. I love reading your stories; you excel at telling fantasy and fables. I only wish I could do as well!
Benjamin Graber05/29/07
This reads like a ballad of old, and it's beautiful...
Verna Cole Mitchell 05/29/07
This sounds like an old English narrative--very visual and sad, excellently done.
Joanne Sher 05/29/07
Beautiful - and I love the repetition. Very effective, and lovely!
william price05/29/07
I love a romantic poem. Great job. God bless.
Rita Garcia05/30/07
Fantastic in every way!
Betty Castleberry05/30/07
Wow. A beautiful legend, for sure. I felt the rhythm faltered a time or two, but it didn't detract from the overall feel and romantic tale told here. Very well done.
dub W05/30/07
A fable? The beginning of an epic? Beautifully written in an eloquent style.
LaNaye Perkins05/30/07
Such a sweet fable woven into poetry. I was very impressed with how you wrote this.
Myrna Noyes05/30/07
What a lovely, romantic mood this poem evokes! Great writing and wonderful story! :)