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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 3 – Advanced)
Topic: Write in the POETRY genre (05/17/07)

TITLE: EQUINOX
By Kenn Allan
05/21/07


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When first you came to call my name,
Your voice flowed on the breeze;
You spoke in colors from the fields
And whispered through the trees...

...but I ran chasing butterflies
And held my freedom dear—
For I was but a carefree child
With ears too young to hear.

When next you came to share your love,
Your passions moved the skies;
The thunder shook the sultry air
And grace flashed in your eyes...

...but I pursued my empty lusts
And spent my heart on youth—
For I was but a foolish lad
Still lost within my truth.

When oft you came to guide my path
On fleeting winter eves,
You marked my days with fading blooms
And swirls of withered leaves...

...but I demanded vain rewards
To covet and accrue—
For I was but a selfish man
With too much else to do.

When last you came to take my hand,
You found me all alone;
My hair was frosted white with age
And life was cold as stone...

...but with a smile you warmed my heart
And healed these sightless eyes—
Now I am but a child again
In search of butterflies.


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Betty Castleberry05/24/07
It's so true that we often waste time not answering the savior's call. This piece said this very well. Kudos.
Pat Guy 05/24/07
I normally don't enjoy rhyming but I loved this! This is so well done with a such a depth of talent.

I enjoyed this immensely.
Melanie Kerr 05/24/07
Excellent! I loved the progrssion of the years and the persistant voice of God.
Janice Fitzpatrick05/24/07
Oh wow! This is truly annointed and powerful! This has to be put on the front page sometime! How true to life this is for so many of us. Thank you for this awesome piece hon. Lord bless you! AMAZING!Janice
Dixie Phillips 05/24/07
What a great line....
And spent my heart on youth
Never heard it put that way before. Very creative!
william price05/24/07
Nice title and message. Well done. God bless.
Maxx .05/24/07
This is very good! I also loved the progression described through the actions. The last lines really bring it home! Dare I say contender? Well done!
Amy Michelle Wiley 05/24/07
Ooooo, I love the wording, the pace, the message. Well done.
Mo 05/24/07
Great ending!
Sharlyn Guthrie05/24/07
I love how this came full-circle. Your wording is very good...makes it all come alive.
Vickie Thomas05/25/07
I love rhyme. You did a very good job here. Very important message.
Verna Cole Mitchell 05/25/07
Just beautiful!
Jacquelyn Horne05/26/07
Very moving. Good job.
Rhonda Clark 05/26/07
I love butterflies. Great work.
Lynda Lee Schab 05/28/07
I read this through twice to process the awesome message woven throughout. WOW! It doesn't get much better than this.
Benjamin Graber05/29/07
This one is excellent! The powerful imagery and inspiring message combine to make a masterpiece.
Joanne Sher 05/30/07
Lovely and sweet. I love how this comes full circle. Made me smile!
Leigh MacKelvey06/01/07
Hi Kenn, wanted to find your peom and read it and finally got around to it. I liked this so much more many other rhyming poems. This was very sophisticated and the contrast of grace in God's eys and thunder was so appealing. I found it very pleasurable to read.
Leigh MacKelvey06/01/07
poem. not peom. I knew that!
Tracy Walshaw06/06/07
So beautiful and true. Thank you for being such a willing vessel for God to use, bringing us the wisdom of His word through the beauty of poetry!
David Butler 06/08/07
Excellent. Keep chasing them butterflies and churning out that verse. Where did the "Equinox" come in? Changing seasons of the soul?