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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 3 – Advanced)
Topic: Write in the POETRY genre (05/17/07)

TITLE: On a Cold Morning ...
By Leigh MacKelvey
05/20/07


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I wonder of poetry ...
Itís a frosty morning, I wrap my palms
around a cup of tea, glean itís warmth.
Last night, Ole Heater groaned, rolled over.
Refused to get up and clock in.

The wonder of poetry, I realize,
is everywhere. May I dare say it is omnipresent,
like You? As I cannot escape Your presence, I cannot
avoid the comparison of the quietness of this house to the
silence of glass before it breaks against a hard stone flooring.

Neither can I hear a deafening noise
without a glimmer in my mind to write just like
the roar of a hungry hurricane.
I feed my aquarium fish,
their endless motion prompts the movement of a poem. Images
in mirrors give thought to challenge the reader with deeply layered verse.

And what of the poet? ...
Like You, the poet notices detail others might ignore.
An ever watchful Eye records into blue-lined notebooks,
then sets them aside until contractions become unbearable and the
mind labors to push out in miraculous birth, a wailing, but healthy

string of well chosen words.
Whether the poet disciplines his baby into metered rhyme
or sets it free to grow within the boundaries of lines such as these,
countless details are magnified into a story, perhaps an impassioned sonnet,
a bold ballad, dreamy sequence or merely the bare bones of an embraced mood.

Oh, the mood, the emotion ...
Like You, poetry allows me to leap into the transcendent
Light of Chocolate, dwell in a dark moment of Weepy Wretchedness,
forgive youthís slippery path. Poems provide unnumbered comforts at times
when my world runs away and threatens to never come home again to live with me.

But thatís not all ...
Like You, poetry surprises. Just when I think ordinary,
a word, a line causes me to gasp at itís royal brilliancy, there all along ...
found when least expected, a mass of wood violets peeking their noses from
beneath towering trunks, to be cherished, gathered into a bunch, held against my chest.

Will poetry die? I wonder.
I believe when this world, gone awry, revolves with such speed
as to cause man no time for leisurely notice of details, his only choice
to run in circles of chaos; and imagination has ceased to make comparison,
poetry will fold her hands and wait for burial in some distant unmarked grave.

Should I fret itís death?
Like You, poetry will come again and
split the sky on a white horse, wave triumphantly with
bejeweled sword, restore the circles into straight paths of Eternal Time.
Like You ... poetry will resurrect her splendor of words and reign forever.

And so ...
The wonder of poetry is You,
The Prolific Poet. With every life giving breath,
Your very Being is a Well Constructed Poem. No need of revision.

Then I, no,... little i,
am urged to lift my pen and let the burst of Spirit Fire
flow through the tip, spilling verse until my soul sings with satisfaction.

Now, now finally ...
I hear the kitchen sigh with warm relief. Ole Heater has
tumbled out of bed and pulled on his work boots. Ah, Sweet poetry.


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Pat Guy 05/24/07
Oh wow! Oh wow! I'm speechless! This is awesome, awesome, awesome!

Wow!
Jacquelyn Horne05/24/07
Lengthy ode to poetry and to the Lord as well. Good job.
Jan Ackerson 05/24/07
I have so many favorites in this wonderful, wonderful extended metaphor, but I think this one takes the cake:

Will poetry die? I wonder.
I believe when this world, gone awry, revolves with such speed
as to cause man no time for leisurely notice of details, his only choice
to run in circles of chaos; and imagination has ceased to make comparison,
poetry will fold her hands and wait for burial in some distant unmarked grave.

Awesome!

Julie Arduini05/24/07
This is more than poetry, this is an experience. I am breathless from the beauty this carries, the strong, strong writing. Amazing, amazing, wow!
Rhonda Clark05/25/07
I like your thoughts and sentiment. Great job.
Verna Cole Mitchell 05/25/07
One of my favorites with beautiful imagery for the new birth of spring!
Verna Cole Mitchell 05/25/07
oops...The previous comment is for the one before this. This is another of my favorites for the ordinary written in with the extraordinary, the imagery, and the idea of God as poet.
Sharlyn Guthrie05/25/07
A masterpiece! This is truly art. But one of my favorite lines began "Then I...no little i" Fantastic!
Joanne Sher 05/25/07
Exceptional in every way. Love the imagery!
Benjamin Graber05/27/07
I loved this. This is my favorite that I've read so far. I especially appreciated the part of poetry coming again.
Great job, keep up the good work!
Sara Harricharan 05/29/07
Okay. Wow! I echo the comments before me. ^_^ This is very nice, well written and presented. I enjoyed reading it very much. My only note, was the end where everything was sort of 'stressed' (from my POV!) about the ordinary, to when in the beginning, it was easy for me to just get lost in the deepness and abstract world, sort of. Your imagery is absolutely masterful. There was many amazing lines that really spoke the heart of this piece. My only complaint is I wish the ending had something a little more, but that's probably just me. Well done! ^_^
Trevas Walker05/30/07
Wow, this is awsome! Well done.
Loren T. Lowery05/30/07
This is in a word: Beautiful!
It just kept getting better and better and my soul soared with your words and the truth in the emotions they unveiled. Great work, truly!
Rita Garcia05/30/07
I love springtime -- and I love your imagery so neating woven in this beautiful poem!
Verna Cole Mitchell 05/31/07
The right place for sure this time! Heartfelt congratulations on a win for a wonderful poem!
Pat Guy 05/31/07
Way-to-go Lady Leigh! One of my very most fav's this week and I'm so glad to see it on 'the list.' It is si deserving.

Enjoy the clouds Lady Leigh.

Love,
Pat
Catrina Bradley 05/31/07
Leigh, my friend, my sister, you did it! I knew this was going to be your week. Wonderful, wonderful, and a well deserved EC!!