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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 3 – Advanced)
Topic: Write in the POETRY genre (05/17/07)

TITLE: Gram's Bonnet
By william price
05/20/07


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A golden straw, sun faded bonnet
Dances along with a warm spring wind
Above long green blades of meadow grass.

Red silk ribbons dangle like kite tails
As the daisy scented breeze guides
Gramís gardening hat toward the river.

Faint past images of blonde tresses
And white cotton dresses twirl and spin
Laughing in the rustling sea of grass.

The whisking wind takes a short respite
Gramís bonnet alights at riverís edge
Swaying reeds sing a song of first love.

A young man and woman sit closely
Splashing tan bare feet as they giggle
Eyes meet, close, lips draw near, a first kiss.

The returning breeze nudges gramís hat
Now floating, sailing, drifting downstream
Toward a white chapel at riverís bend.

Hymns flutter from the churchís windows
A covey of doves soar Heavenward
Glory, Glory, to our King on High.

At riverís bend, the guiding zephyr
Lifts the hat back into its grasp
Landing at the churchís stone garden.

Preachersí echoing voices proclaim
Ashes to ashes and dust to dust
Gramís bonnet tours rows of granite graves.

The warm spring breeze now weakens and cools
Red roses, bouquets of wild daisies
Adorn País, now Gramís, memorial.

The old golden straw, sun bleached bonnet
Now rests in peace on freshly cut sod
From the meadow of gramís long green grass.


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Helen Paynter05/24/07
A clever contrivance (I mean that in the complimentary sense) to have the journey of the bonnet portray the stages of life. Beautiful imagery.
Dixie Phillips 05/24/07
Loved your "lively" verbs and the kite tails. What a word picture!
Maxx .05/24/07
I liked this piece ... the image of the bonnet, the stages of life, the final resting on the grave. Nicely done.
Sharlyn Guthrie05/24/07
Your word choices are exquisite. I enjoyed the bonnet "ride".
Joanne Sher 05/25/07
Love the images here - so lovely and compelling and wonderful. Enjoyed this "journey" very much!
Rhonda Clark 05/28/07
Very sweet. Great imagery. Good job.
Betty Castleberry05/28/07
This is very visual. Love the history of the bonnet, too. I really liked this a lot.
Dee Yoder 05/28/07
Lovely images. I like the word pictures in your poem very much. Gentle and nostalgic.
Jan Ackerson 05/29/07
First of all, your hint just cracked me up...

Now for this charming poem...what lovely images, and the journey of the bonnet through this woman's life is a very charming touch! Sort of reminds me of the feather in "Forrest Gump." So nice!
Benjamin Graber05/29/07
Such a creative idea to follow the journey of a dancing bonnet! I enjoyed this... :)
Verna Cole Mitchell 05/29/07
What a clever idea to create the story of a life with a bonnet. You have some truly lovely word pictures here.
Jacquelyn Horne05/29/07
I recently had to say goodbye to a friend who spent a great deal of her life making "prayer bonnets". In each vintage-looking bonnet, she placed a prayer that went along to the recipient. You make me miss her very much.
Caitlynn Lowe05/29/07
Some nice imagery involved here. :)
Catrina Bradley 05/29/07
You took me on an emotional ride on the bonnet's trip through time and place in Gram's life. I also loved the flow and rhythm throughout this poem. Well done!!!
Rita Garcia05/30/07
Charming and beautiful!
Edy T Johnson 05/30/07
You touch the heart once again with your imaginative writing. What pictures you paint!
Donna Emery05/30/07
Gorgeous word picture and a wonderfully evocative poem. Thanks for sharing it
Misti Chancellor05/30/07
I like the pictures you paint as the bonnet dances its way to its final resting place. Good job!
dub W05/30/07
The images truly paint word pictures...nuf said.
LaNaye Perkins05/30/07
I loved floating along the breeze with Gram's Bonnet. Well done.
Loren T. Lowery05/30/07
This is charming and warmly written. I liked the use of the wind to show the ebb and flow of life - so creative and easy to be caught up in and carried away.
Dara Sorensen05/30/07
I love the imagery! Very creative indeed!
Linda Watson Owen05/30/07
What a beautiful journey you've taken your reader on! This poem flows with the winds and currents of life itself. Wonderful!
Lynda Lee Schab 05/31/07
Such a sweet, gentle poem. I felt like I was giding right along with Gram's bonnet. Well thought-out piece, nicely executed.