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05/24/07
I'm blinking back the tears. This is so real and moving...and the hope that springs eternal! I love the ballet shoes peeking out from under her dress. Well done!
05/24/07
Beautifully written. A good reminder to keep praying for those we may think are "lost".
05/24/07
What a beautiful poem of HOPE!!! God has given you an "inspirational" bent. Thanks for blessing us!
05/24/07
very good ... and what a real message! This really reads well and has meaning. great!
05/24/07
Beautiful! I'm so thankful the pain returned to joy and offered hope. This is a wonderful poem and I'm sure God has a place for it to be used to minister to others. Don't let it sit, but find that place. Let it be a blessing to the world.
05/24/07
You have captured the emotions so well. Excellent!
05/24/07
I like the ending.
05/25/07
Lovely, touching poem! My favorite line is "Watching her joy bubble out through her toes." Perfect description! I liked the happy, hope-filled ending, too! :)
05/25/07
Excellent 30,000-foot view of a parental roller-coaster ride, with a great upbeat ending. Just a few tweaks in the meter and rhyme scheme and this would really shine!
05/26/07
This is awesome. This hits close to home without the happy ending. You have described so many. Very good work.
05/27/07
Very dramatic and well written, heartfelt poem.
05/27/07
Those of us with daughters feel the clutch in our hearts as we read this! You captured every mother's emotions and love and willingness to sacrifice for our daughters.
06/27/07
Marilee, I'm going to feature this wonderful poem in the Front Page showcase for the week of July 16th. Look for it on the FW home page. Great job!
07/16/07
This is a wondefully encouraging piece for all despairing parents- congratulations for being so open
07/16/07
Simply beautiful! This just glows right now! Heartfelt and stirring! Well done! (I especially love the touch of the ballet shoes!)
07/17/07
Wonderful, sweet Marilee. This tore at my heartstrings. Glad you got the showcase - can't believe I missed it the first time around!
07/19/07
This is so impacting. What a wonderful poem on the heartbreak of a mother when her child goes astray. Loved the end.
07/19/07
You have such a gift. My heart was breaking for the mother and I was so grateful when I read the end. Beautiful job!
07/19/07
Oh how touching. It had my daughter and I in tears. We were so releived it had a happy ending. Great job of describing what happens in a young persons life to draw them from God. Wonderful poem.
07/20/07
Oh this is so good. I saw your poem on the home page and had to finish reading it. I could picture your daughter and the journey of parenthood. Since my girls are still young, it was a little frightening. But you stayed on your knees and there was a happy ending. Thanks!
07/22/07
I too have a daughter. She has lost herself along the way. So all I can do is go to my prayer closet. When I read this I cried and found a new bit of hope. Thanks for sharing such a beautiful poem!
07/22/07
I believe so many of us can relate to your emotions in this masterfully written poem. Thank you also for providing the encouragement we all so desperately need through the Lord.