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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 3 – Advanced)
Topic: Write in the POETRY genre (05/17/07)

TITLE: Guy's Eyes Lie
By Bryan Coomes
05/17/07


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Matilda Alanna Norman causes many a man to stare
As her appearance is rather curious and her countenance just fair
There are some things about her that arenít exactly right
Iím not too sure what I should think since I donít have great sight
Looking at her face so strong that has a chiseled jaw defined
Does make me think that somethingís off but honestly Iím not refined
As I survey her rugged chin with stubble strewn all round about

Normally something like that would tend to really freak me out
Ogling at her thin coarse lips thereís something seeming quite amiss
Really though, how would I know, since I have never even been kissed
Maybe if I caressed her neck then she would find me suave and bad
Although that perpetual lump in her throat suggests that she is always sad
Now Iím not sure what this might mean for it seems to me to be so odd

In looking at her husky frame her shoulders appear to be quite broad
She tends to lack what women have a bosom of any varying degree

Really though due to my sight, the problem here could just be me
Every time that she is near and I have the chance to hear her speak
All that comes to mind to me is how sheís not the least bit meek
Laughs that stir from deep within bring rumbling bellows to be heard
Listening to her expressions of joy is in no way at all absurd
You could surmise thereís something weird because the way she tends to walk

And every time she comes and goes all others stop and canít help gawk

Maybe I have got it wrong itís happened to me once or twice
And if Iím wrong which may be so then please just heed this simple advice:
Never to trust what you think you see for very high may be the price

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Authorís Note:

Now I can give this one last clue and hopefully youíll figure it out
Of course you may already know, but there still may be some lingering doubt
Top to bottom you should read each letter that begins each line
Each word revealed will make it clear and thus complete this silly rhyme


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Benjamin Graber05/24/07
LOL... This one is high on humor... :)
Birdie Courtright05/24/07
How clever of you! This is too funny!
Jacquelyn Horne05/24/07
I got the message from the poem, but thanks for the explanation in the note.
Joyce Poet05/24/07
Very creative acrostic. And cute too.
Marilee Alvey05/24/07
You're cracking me up! Wow! A message within the message. I like puzzles. Very creative!
Rhonda Clark 05/26/07
Okay, this is unusual. Great job with the secondary puzzle.
Jan Ackerson 05/28/07
Hilarious!
Lenda Blackmon05/29/07
How funny! I was thinking while I was reading it that it sounded like you were describing a man and not a woman. Clever.
Dara Sorensen05/29/07
This one was unusual but funny :-) I suppose I am slow, but I had to read it over again to get it even with the hint. LOL its been a long day.

Great little piece of humor though! :-)
Catrina Bradley 05/30/07
I did get it before the hint, but loved the end anyway! It explained why you chose to break lines like you did. Clever, funny, and entertaining!
Rita Garcia05/30/07
BRILLIANT! Love it!
Cassie Memmer05/30/07
Cute, entertaining, and clever! Nice work!
Verna Cole Mitchell 05/30/07
And I should have taken a hint from the narrator's poor sight. Cute poem.
Joanne Sher 05/30/07
Very clever and fun! Love this unique acrostic.
dub W05/30/07
Clever, I enjoyed the humorous approach.
Betty Castleberry05/30/07
Witty and fun. I like your footnote. Without it I wouldn't have gotten what the first letters spelled. Well done.
Patty Wysong05/30/07
Fun!! I realized 'she' was a 'he' but I needed the author's note to see the 'side note.' Thanks for the laugh! :-)
Dolores Stohler05/30/07
You had me laughing all the way through. Great touch of humor, although the meter is off I think.
Sara Harricharan 05/30/07
Okay. LOL! This is cute. I love the acronym thing. Very nice! ^_^