The Official Writing Challenge
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05/17/07
What a great start, and you kept the great pace all the way through. Strong writing, gripping message. Great work!
05/21/07
The last half is superb! In the first half, you spend quite a few words filling us in, giving background information. In such a small word limit, try for ways of telling just a small story, so that the background can be inferred. Then you can spend more time on character development, and write a tighter, more fast-paced story. Your writing skills are top notch, and the story is gripping.
Well written. Good story.
05/21/07
Very visual and compelling. You had me engaged from beginning to end. Great descriptions.
Thrilling story. Great job, I really enjoyed this one!
05/23/07
The borg would definitely disagree with this-lol! What a great read. I like the pace of this and especially the end with Paul's last words. So much heart! I also like the acronyms you used, "Salt" etc. Very creative! ^_^
You made the ultimate persecution of Christians very real in your suspenseful science fiction story. Good job.
05/23/07
You have an awesome writing gift! Creative...I enjoyed the read!
05/23/07
Amazing. This was great writing.
This is a good look at a dark world. Good writing that held my attention. Thumbs up.
05/23/07
First - loved the title :) A very well told image of how it could be. Nicely done :)