The Official Writing Challenge
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05/17/07
In-ter-rest-ing. I like the theme. Very difficult to tackle all you wanted, but I got it. It seemed you cut a little short. I suspect you have a large story in mind. Give me the struggle, before or after the opperation. It will help us sympathize with your protagonist.
05/17/07
I could see this one as a movie, great potential!
05/19/07
I loved the concept, very original, but I think you tried to cover too much ground here. I know - so much to say, so few words to say it in. yeggy