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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 3 – Advanced)
Topic: Write in the SCIENCE FICTION genre (05/10/07)

TITLE: Famous
By Kaylee Blake
05/15/07


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Anthony reached into his pocket and drew out his SquakTalk. Flipping it from mp3 mode to walkie-talkie, he spoke into the device. “Dude, chick sighting at 12 o’clock. Get down here. After all, this is what I hired you for.”

Suddenly the air above him was split with ear-piercing cry. “WAAA-HOOOOOOOOO!!!!” A man in a surreptitious black jacket with the letters “FBI” embroidered across the back, slid to a stop next to Anthony. “Man, who needs snow when ya got a rocket powered hover board? This thing is wicked-awesome!” He adjusted his jacket and cleared his throat. “Um, you called?”

“Yeah,” Anthony turned to three teenage girls on his right. Removing his sunglasses, he flashed them a brilliant smile. “Joseph, I want you to meet my two biggest fans. This here is Joy and that’s Kayla. They’re sisters.” He turned back to the man in black. “I think they want a show. Think you can arrange that?”

“No problem, boss. I’ll get right on it.” He fired up his hover board and, just as suddenly as he appeared, he was gone.

Anthony turned back to the girls and noticed that the one covered in an abundance of freckles, Kayla, was clutching a notebook and a pen and just staring at him in speechless awe. He held out a hand. “I take it you want my autograph?”

“Yes! Y-y-yes, yes of c-course.” She handed him her notebook and pen. Never once taking her eyes from Anthony, she leaned over to her sister. “Pinch me. If this is a dream, I don’t want to wake up, but I’ve just gotta know…”

“I would, but you’d scream and wake me up, too.” Joy brushed her long blond hair out of her eyes. “To meet the real, the actual Anthony Abram in a dream, is enough for me. I don’t have to know if this is a dream.”

“Well, I’d pinch you,” Anthony offered. “But the last time I did that to a fan, she fainted.” He handed the notebook back to Kayla. “So what’s your favorite film?”

Both sisters answered at once.

“Prince Charming Comes Home!”

“General Kicks Butt!”

Joy turned to her sister and frowned. “No way. Prince Charming Comes Home! He’s so good-looking and funny in that movie!”

“Whatever,” Kayla scoffed. “In General Kicks Butt he’s so smart and strong!”

“Ladies, ladies,” Anthony laughed. “Relax. I’m glad you enjoyed both movies. I had a lot of fun making them.” He drew out his SquakTalk again. “How’s it going, Joe?”

“Just about…finished! OK, look up and to the left, next to that air ramp in front of ya…I think your fans will be in for a big surprise…”

All of a sudden, a chair went sailing through the air with a holographic image of Anthony himself, strapped to the real chair with a bomb underneath.

The girls gasped.

“Just like in the movie My New Best Friend!” Joy squealed.

Joy and Kayla watched the scene unfold before them with awe etched on every line of their face. Anthony merely watched them with amusement.

The holographic Anthony managed to free himself from the ropes binding him and he leapt the thirty feet to ground, the chair blowing up just as he hit the ground and rolled.

Glowing cinders from the chair rained down, but the teenage fans didn’t seem to notice. Anthony thought that their amazement was so comical, he might giggle. But he refrained.

Then the finale.

This was Anthony’s favorite part. The next scene wasn’t actually from the movie, but it was always his favorite nonetheless.

Two young women, both holographic, went running towards the hero. The freckled one clutched a notebook and pen.

Kayla sucked in a deep breath, and spoke in a hushed tone mingled with surprise, excitement, and disbelief. “That’s…why, Joy!…that’s us!”

“Golly gee…Kayla, it is us!”

The holographic teens got their autographs and walked away, apparently walking on cloud nine. When the figures before them disappeared, both sisters turned to face Anthony. “Wow. Thank-you soooo much!”

“Yeah, that was…just incredible!”

“No problem. It was my pleasure,” Anthony couldn’t stop grinning. This is what he loved about being famous. “Well, it was nice to meet you two. Have a great day.”

“Not only is he good-looking, smart, funny, and strong-”

Anthony fired up his hover board. But before he sped away, he heard Joy finish her sister’s thought.

“-he’s also a really nice guy!”


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Jan Ackerson 05/18/07
This is just adorable. In the sci-fi world, there's usually such bleakness and lack of hope--this shows that the future need not be feared: there will still be sweet teenagers and innocent crushes, and human kindness.

I think you meant "inconspicuous" instead of "surreptitious," and there were a few small punctuation errors, no big deal.

These charming future teens (is one of them based on you?) deserve a longer story, that's for sure.
Sara Harricharan 05/18/07
LOL! I already half-love Anthony. What a neat 'celebrity'! Famous didn't seem to daunt him at all, especially with the little treat he had for Joy and her sister. Too cute and funny! I especially like the bit with rocket-powered hoverboards. That sounds neat. I think you captured a rare side of sci-fi. Kudos to you! ^_^
Julie Arduini05/18/07
What a charmer this is! I loved these characters and you gave a new look to Sci Fi, and I really liked it!
Betty Castleberry05/18/07
Fresh and fun! You should expand this. I can see Anthony in a series that would appeal to teens. Good job.
Rita Garcia05/19/07
Creative and fun! I agree with Betty, expand this, it would make a great "short novel." Fantastic writing!
Helen Paynter05/20/07
What a fun piece - I thought the images were really vivid. I kept expecting something to go wrong, or the hero to be a villain in some way, but I'm glad I was wrong. Well done.
Christine Dunn05/20/07
Very original and fun. Well done!
Verna Cole Mitchell 05/20/07
I got a kick out this story--really enjoyed it. If I were with those girls, I'd just want to say, "Now, how did he do that?" You cleverly used the science fiction genre, and with good characterization!
Benjamin Graber05/20/07
LOL... I loved this! Great story with lots of laughs packed in.