The Official Writing Challenge
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05/17/07
Good story! You really held my interest through it. I was also glad, though, that you gave Louis a second chance at the end. :)
05/18/07
Very chilling and realistic!
05/20/07
I guess I saw a person with no hope, that he had used up all of his second chances. Now it was the day of the Great Judgement call, Louie had missed the mark, as he always did. He will now take the elevator to the bottmless pit many floors below. I would have let him wake as Ebenezer did from the nightmare,and as a changed man. But it is your story - good job in the tellig of it.