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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 3 – Advanced)
Topic: Write in the HISTORICAL genre (05/03/07)

TITLE: The Great Blues Heron
By william price
05/10/07


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Soaring seven feet above the swaying saw-grass sung Sammy the Blue Heron. True to his name, Sammy was singing the blues.

There once was…a day
Not so long…ago


At 50 years old, Sammy was the oldest Ardea Herodias in the history of the species. Big Cranky, as he was called by some, swung to the left and then back to the right remembering the tales the old-birds told about the People of the Glades, Ponce de Leon and the pirates.

In the ev…er glades
Where gators…did grow


The Great Blue Heron circled to the left. His wings extended as far as they could. Sammy’s long neck craned as he scoured the shriveling river of grass. Even in his lifetime, he recalled a day when his glades were bustling with life, food was plentiful and the water deep.

When I could…alight
And swallow…Fish whole


A warm easterly breeze from the Atlantic Ocean began to blow in the face of the setting sun, lifting Sammy to a higher vantage point.

My home’s go…ing dry
Got nowhere…to go


The solitary bird suddenly felt like he was no longer alone. A new strength filled his wings. He heard a voice whisper in his ear, “Can I sing a few lines?”

There once was…a time
My Spirit…did flow


Sammy started to soar higher as the song of the wind blew in his ear. The presence of the voice made his eyes sharpen in focus.

Then man turned…around
Took over…the show


The revelation of who he was flying with caused Sammy’s wings to go limp. But, the strength of Him who was now singing kept the Great Blue Heron in the air.

Yet now is…the time
When I they…will know


Higher and higher the strength of the voice carried Sammy. Greater height had no Heron ever flown. The entire river of grass lay below him. The setting sun seemingly lit the everglades on fire as the transparent veins created by airboat trails turned crimson. For that moment, Sammy’s habitat looked like a heart with fire red-blood cursing through it. The everglades came to life right below Sammy’s eyes.

***

The next morning, Gabby Gator glided towards Mr. Heron’s home.

“Morning, Sammy. Got a blues song for today?”

“Not going to sing anymore blues, Gabby. The Creator flew with me last night and says things are going to change.”

“The Creator?”

“Yes, the Creator. He came in on an easterly breeze. Do you remember the days before we were sandwiched between Disney World and Fort Lauderdale? There were thousands of my kind and even more of yours? It’s going to be even bigger, even better. The Creator’s Spirit is going to start blowing, Gabby, and when it does, we need to be ready.”

“Ready for what, Sammy?”

“For the day of the Creator, Gabby Gator. Now, you will have to excuse me. I have to take off. I got a new song to sing. No more blues, Mr. Gator. I’ve traded my blues in for praise, and I just have to sing it.”

“What should I do, Sammy?”

“Tell the rest to start singing a new song, Gabby. Our history was good, but the Creator’s future is even better.”

Sammy then spread his big blue wings and took off in flight, soaring above the rustling saw-grass with a new grace.

The River…of Grass
Is starting…to grow
God’s River…of life
Beginning…to flow


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Teri Wilson05/10/07
What a beautiful story of God's natural world. I especially love the play on words of the Great Blue/Blues Heron's name. Also special is the way you wove the song throughout the story. I love this one. God bless!
Lynda Schultz 05/10/07
A singing heron with a sense of history. Now that's creative. Great work.
Betty Castleberry05/11/07
Mega points for originality. This was an entertaining read with a message, too. Thumbs up.
Sharlyn Guthrie05/11/07
How clever and fun to read!
Joanne Sher 05/13/07
I could hear the voices so clearly in this piece. Your description was also amazingly vivid. Delightful.
Ann Grover05/14/07
Very creative... excellent imagery and descriptions. Reminds me of the words "All nature sings..." in the hymn "This is My Father's World." My favourite part is the description of the 'veins' made by the airboats and rendered crimson by the setting sun...a reflection of the Father's heart for ALL of His creation. A very hopeful piece.
Rita Garcia05/14/07
May we all trade in our "blues" for "songs of praise." This needs to be illustrated and made into a book! Fantastic, each lines just keeps getting better!
Jan Ackerson 05/14/07
I was really drawn to this, as I have a daughter who will soon be moving to Florida. I like the interweaving of the song and the story; a deft touch.
Edy T Johnson 05/14/07
For once, I am speechless! But, dittos to all the above commenters, as they have already illuminated what I liked about your story. An illustrated children's book would be a winner, I'm sure.
Linda Germain 05/14/07
This is so original and creative it begs to be published. Excellent!
Mariane Holbrook05/16/07
I am not often tempted to plagurize but in this case I came close. What a great piece of writing. I wish you could have asked for permission to add another 750 words. Kudos!
T. F. Chezum05/16/07
Creative, ingenius, interesting ... can't say any more than every one else has. Great job.
LaNaye Perkins05/16/07
How wonderful! I loved the way you told of God's plans through the eyes of the animals. Well Done!
Sara Harricharan 05/16/07
This could be a children's story! So cute and creative at the same time. It's written in a nice, easy-going tone, with some pretty neat descriptions. Thanks for sharing this inspiring piece!
Loren T. Lowery05/16/07
It's difficult to add anything original or insightful when you comment this late in the game, so I'll also add my ditto marks and say I enjoyed the Heron's voice immensely!
Marilee Alvey05/17/07
Bill, once again, you have stunned me with your creativity. Your descriptions were magnificent! How like all of us is that blue heron. We never get to move away from our current problems and get some perspective on things, from God's point of view. How often, too, do we shut out that tune the Creator sings to us. This story reminded me that I need a fresh, new perspective on life......TODAY
Marilee Alvey05/17/07
Bill, once again, you have stunned me with your creativity. Your descriptions were magnificent! How like all of us is that blue heron. We never get to move away from our current problems and get some perspective on things, from God's point of view. How often, too, do we shut out that tune the Creator sings to us. This story reminded me that I need a fresh, new perspective on life......TODAY
Marilee Alvey05/17/07
Bill, once again, you have stunned me with your creativity. Your descriptions were magnificent! How like all of us is that blue heron. We never get to move away from our current problems and get some perspective on things, from God's point of view. How often, too, do we shut out that tune the Creator sings to us. This story reminded me that I need a fresh, new perspective on life......TODAY has arrived...and should be celebrated! We get old and lose the excitement, the wonder of God's creation. Thanks for the many AHA's of your story. Your talent amazes me.
Bonnie Way05/18/07
This was great! I loved your story and how God talks to the heron. Parts of it reminded me of Thornton W. Burgess books, but with a faith twist. Awesome! Are there more stories??? :)
Debbie Wistrom02/12/08
Thanks for posting this on the Children's thread, I enjoyed this creative story very much.