The Official Writing Challenge
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05/10/07
What a beautiful story of God's natural world. I especially love the play on words of the Great Blue/Blues Heron's name. Also special is the way you wove the song throughout the story. I love this one. God bless!
05/10/07
A singing heron with a sense of history. Now that's creative. Great work.
Mega points for originality. This was an entertaining read with a message, too. Thumbs up.
How clever and fun to read!
05/13/07
I could hear the voices so clearly in this piece. Your description was also amazingly vivid. Delightful.
05/14/07
Very creative... excellent imagery and descriptions. Reminds me of the words "All nature sings..." in the hymn "This is My Father's World." My favourite part is the description of the 'veins' made by the airboats and rendered crimson by the setting sun...a reflection of the Father's heart for ALL of His creation. A very hopeful piece.
05/14/07
May we all trade in our "blues" for "songs of praise." This needs to be illustrated and made into a book! Fantastic, each lines just keeps getting better!
05/14/07
I was really drawn to this, as I have a daughter who will soon be moving to Florida. I like the interweaving of the song and the story; a deft touch.
05/14/07
For once, I am speechless! But, dittos to all the above commenters, as they have already illuminated what I liked about your story. An illustrated children's book would be a winner, I'm sure.
05/14/07
This is so original and creative it begs to be published. Excellent!
I am not often tempted to plagurize but in this case I came close. What a great piece of writing. I wish you could have asked for permission to add another 750 words. Kudos!
Creative, ingenius, interesting ... can't say any more than every one else has. Great job.
How wonderful! I loved the way you told of God's plans through the eyes of the animals. Well Done!
05/16/07
This could be a children's story! So cute and creative at the same time. It's written in a nice, easy-going tone, with some pretty neat descriptions. Thanks for sharing this inspiring piece!
It's difficult to add anything original or insightful when you comment this late in the game, so I'll also add my ditto marks and say I enjoyed the Heron's voice immensely!
05/17/07
Bill, once again, you have stunned me with your creativity. Your descriptions were magnificent! How like all of us is that blue heron. We never get to move away from our current problems and get some perspective on things, from God's point of view. How often, too, do we shut out that tune the Creator sings to us. This story reminded me that I need a fresh, new perspective on life......TODAY
05/17/07
Bill, once again, you have stunned me with your creativity. Your descriptions were magnificent! How like all of us is that blue heron. We never get to move away from our current problems and get some perspective on things, from God's point of view. How often, too, do we shut out that tune the Creator sings to us. This story reminded me that I need a fresh, new perspective on life......TODAY
05/17/07
Bill, once again, you have stunned me with your creativity. Your descriptions were magnificent! How like all of us is that blue heron. We never get to move away from our current problems and get some perspective on things, from God's point of view. How often, too, do we shut out that tune the Creator sings to us. This story reminded me that I need a fresh, new perspective on life......TODAY has arrived...and should be celebrated! We get old and lose the excitement, the wonder of God's creation. Thanks for the many AHA's of your story. Your talent amazes me.
05/18/07
This was great! I loved your story and how God talks to the heron. Parts of it reminded me of Thornton W. Burgess books, but with a faith twist. Awesome! Are there more stories??? :)
Thanks for posting this on the Children's thread, I enjoyed this creative story very much.