The Official Writing Challenge
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I enjoyed the sharp, short phrases which gave a clear picture of the MC in your poem, and the abuse he had experienced. Some very good descriptions.

I'm certainly not an expert in poetry, so perhaps I'm wrong - but I felt that the poem could have been broken up a little, perhaps into two or three verses, to make it a bit easier to read.
Gripping. Descriptive. So sad. You accomplished what you set out to do. The injustice of it makes me want to scream. well done.
Encore! More! This is what I call Faith Writing. Thanks for taking on a very dark time in history and ripping the reader back there in 5 words or less.
Haunting - such stark imagery and truth here.
Beautiful poem, the breakless structure works, the ending is heartbreaking--really, really excellent.

"It's" always means "it is." There were two instances where I think you wanted "its" without an apostrophe. Sorry about the nitpick.

This is an exemplar of free verse poetry!
WOW! You evoked such strong emotions! Perfect in every way!
Very poignant. Very on target.