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05/10/07
Very informative. I like how you wove the inner, private war with the events of the WWII.
I like how you used events in day-by-day life to show the life of a young girl living in that time of history. Keep up the good work!
This was good. They should print it in the Cocoa newspaper. Nice job!
05/15/07
You made this really interesting with the personal conflict along with the war. Fantastic writing!
05/15/07
I love the way you told this story - I enjoyed walking along with your MC through the streets of Cocoa, and through the conflicts in her mind. Wonderful.
Your words flow beautifully. You made the MC come to life. I enjoy your type of storytelling. I also like the footnote.
05/16/07
Nicely done. This story had a quiet calm feeling to it.
05/16/07
What s nice town.I felt like I was there! Thanks!
05/18/07
War within, war around. Jumped around a lot in subject and thoughts which added to the conflict. Well told from a child's perspective opening the mind of adults as well to our own conflict. Well done!

Reads as if it were a true story in detailing the area, times, and thoughts.

God bless and keep writing.