The Official Writing Challenge
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05/13/07
This is a very clever idea, and I believe you have the seeds of a good story here.

It's a bit confusing, though...lots of tense switches and problems with sentence structure made me a bit unclear what was going on.

I'd encourage you to come back to this one, and keep at it. It's worth a second go-round.