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05/10/07
It doesn't seem possible 5 and 1/2 years have already passed since this sad but historic moment. My child was 16 at the time and I guess I didn't think how the little ones might be affected and the difficult job the teachers would have explaining. Thanks for the reminder.God Bless all teachers~
05/11/07
Painful subject, beautifully written. Excellent meter, no stumbles here. It flowed extrememely well.
05/11/07
This absolutely grabbed me and didn't let go. Excellent reminder of the pain so many of us went through.
I've read many accounts of that awful day, but this was superb in every way. After all the anxious thoughts, I just love your ending.
05/14/07
Great job with the rhyme, the meter, and the story-telling was quite compelling.

The only jarring note was the last word: you needed it for the rhyme, but "transfix" doesn't really have the meaning you were going for, I don't think.

This chilling poem really brought back memories, and points us to the only source of comfort and hope. Nicely done.