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05/10/07
It doesn't seem possible 5 and 1/2 years have already passed since this sad but historic moment. My child was 16 at the time and I guess I didn't think how the little ones might be affected and the difficult job the teachers would have explaining. Thanks for the reminder.God Bless all teachers~
05/11/07
Painful subject, beautifully written. Excellent meter, no stumbles here. It flowed extrememely well.
05/11/07
This absolutely grabbed me and didn't let go. Excellent reminder of the pain so many of us went through.
05/14/07
I've read many accounts of that awful day, but this was superb in every way. After all the anxious thoughts, I just love your ending.
05/14/07
Great job with the rhyme, the meter, and the story-telling was quite compelling.

The only jarring note was the last word: you needed it for the rhyme, but "transfix" doesn't really have the meaning you were going for, I don't think.

This chilling poem really brought back memories, and points us to the only source of comfort and hope. Nicely done.