The Official Writing Challenge
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05/10/07
A very tender and heart-warming story.
Yes, tender, is the word! And charming. Well done.
05/11/07
Very touching. A minor note: watch the accumulated speech tags (she said).
05/12/07
This story has some real potential. Just pick a point of view (POV) and stick with it. Short stories especially need to be tol from only one perspective. You switche dhalf way through from Margaret's POV to Mom's POV. But the story does fit well within the genre!
You did a good job with this and I'm glad I read it.