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I've had a baby in ICU...I've done the careful holding, watchful of the tubes and have captured my feelings exactly as I remember them. Very well done!
Your story brought back so many memories! My grandson spent the first 3 months of his life in UCLA's ICU, had seven surgeries during that time, and wore tubes everywhere one could be inserted - including the awful IV in the top of his little head. I felt your pain vividly. Excellent visualization, nicely written.
Heartfelt story. I could feel your mixed emotions. That's good.
How very tender! Lovingly and beautifully written.
I had a little one in ICU too, and you have done a beautiful job of capturing the anguish of the mother's heart. Nicely done. Cheri
What a tender story and written from a heart of love. I'm so glad I got to read it. Very nice job.
This is so vivid and real. You stirred my heart. Your last line is perfect.
Beautiful. You really bring the reader into the story to experience the setting and the emotions.
Good telling of a real life situation. I could identify precisely with the hospital environment, long waiting, fatigue, etc. I like how you gave insight to the MC's feelings of well-intentioned comments from visitors. Good job!
This is well-written and very touching, even more so because I know of a baby named Faith who had a heart defect. She lived a hero for three months.