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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 3 – Advanced)
Topic: Write in the ROMANCE genre (04/19/07)

TITLE: A Rose in Time
By Pat Guy
04/25/07


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One dozen roses, right smack-dab in the middle of the mantle piece of her piano. That is where they had been placed, on this day, for the past 38yrs. … and they were beautiful – a different color every year. There wasn’t a color or variety she didn’t like … and he knew this.

Over her shoulder she took in the view of their backyard. She moved in closer. His tender care had created their own exotic paradise of palms and flowers. A lingering sigh clouded the sliding glass doors – her handprints a touch away from English Ivy winding its way up a black iron trellis.

She was dressed and ready, as always on this special day …Why did he always make her wait? She had given up long ago of prodding him along. She looked back at the roses and went to take her place on the bench. Something she did while waiting for him, she wondered if maybe this was the reason he always took so long. She placed her hands on the keys and closed her eyes … a soft delicate scent touched her fingers – and she began.

The tick, tick, tick of the old chime clock was caught up in a dance of melody and fragrance – swirling and twirling … flowing as one. A love song of no words – their song.

She hadn’t expected the tears, for she wasn’t sad. On the contrary, she had good news to share. Oh Darling, you’ll be so happy! This day of all days!

Her fingers, her wrists, her arms relaxed as she sighed her thoughts, The roses are so lovely … I can’t wait!

She got up, leaned over and cupped the roses as she buried her face in their soft bed of sweet petals – the tears she shed were filled with a satisfaction her heart could barely contain … she spoke to the love the roses held in his absence …

“Oh my love … finally … finally … I’ll be with you soon. It won’t be long now. We agreed – no lingering death for either of us. The kids understand. They’ve been through it before. And now finally … soon … maybe by Christmas, I’ll be there. Why … oh why did I have to wait so long?”

She sat down and rested her head in her arms on the mantelpiece … and wept.

The old clock hushed it’s mournful note … a soft delicate scent lifted her head and she closed her eyes, her fingers stroked the keys – and she began.

The tick, tick, tick of the old chime clock was caught up in a dance of melody and fragrance – swirling and twirling … flowing as one. A love song of no words – their song.

And as she played on, and as time passed … he waited … with a rose of every color in Heaven.















©2007


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Betty Castleberry04/26/07
I didn't figure this out until close to the end. The descriptions were beautiful. The last line is a tear jerker. You should post a tissue warning.
Sally Hanan04/26/07
Beautifully written, the words capture every scent and movement and sound. You managed to convey her impatience incredibly well too.
Amy Michelle Wiley 04/28/07
I got that she's dying, but didn't quite get the "no lingering death" paragraph... Other than my wondering what that means, I found this to be beautifully written!
Venice Kichura04/30/07
This is beautiful, so well crafted and a tear-jerker.
Jan Ackerson 04/30/07
Oh my, oh my...I'm speechless. This one's one of the best EVER!
Rita Garcia04/30/07
I agree with Jan, this left me speechless. Reminds me of the words to a song, "if we never meet again, this side of heaven ..." Beautiful writing, absolutely, beautiful!
Cheri Hardaway 05/01/07
Very, very beautiful. Poignant. Thanks, Cheri
Lynda Schultz 05/02/07
I read this one earlier on in the week but didn't comment then. To tell you the truth, I didn't know what to say - maybe that's it - it is something to be savoured in silence. Wonderful!
Verna Cole Mitchell 05/02/07
A beautiful story! A phrase to savor: a love song of no words! Oh my!
Loren T. Lowery05/02/07
Beautiful and thought provoking. Romance is indeed timeless. Enjoyed this greatly.
Jacquelyn Horne05/02/07
Bittersweet. Good romance.
Joanne Sher 05/02/07
Absolutely poetic and beautiful - swept me away in a very special way.
Sara Harricharan 05/02/07
I agree with posting a tissue warning. This is so sweet and sad at the same time. I love the descriptions and the feel as if I'm standing just outside a door and looking in on a very tender scene between a lovely couple. Well done.
Julie Arduini05/02/07
Wow, the essence of romance captured here! Beautiful, sweet, emotional and simply masterful.
william price05/02/07
Now, Pat! Warn me some before I read a story like this. Per usual, a very good story with a real feel and a heartbeat to boot. Even though it felt like I was choking on a dorito. (Choked up) SHame on you:)
God bless.
Cheri Hardaway 05/03/07
Congratulations on being highly commended! Nice work. Blessings, Cheri
Laurie Glass05/03/07
Awww...what beautiful writing. And what a touching story. :)
Seema Bagai 12/17/08
Thanks for posting a link to this. Beautifully written.