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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 3 – Advanced)
Topic: Write in the ROMANCE genre (04/19/07)

TITLE: Mystery Date
By Myrna Noyes
04/25/07


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The ringing phone woke Terri from a little snooze that Friday evening in front of the TV, and she drowsily answered, “Hello?”

“Hi, there! This is Dave Webster. Remember me? Ever since we met I’ve been wishing we could get to know each other a bit better. You seemed like such a nice person.”

“I did?” stammered Terri, racking her brain for any idea as to who this guy was.

“Yes, and I’d like to invite you to meet me at Applebee’s around eight tomorrow evening for dessert—if you don’t have other plans, that is.”

“Uh, I’m not sure I’d recognize you. I’ve met so many people lately.”

“Yeah, there was quite a group around you that afternoon, but I bet you’ll remember me when you see me. Just in case, though, I’ll be wearing tan slacks and a blue shirt. Is it a date?”

“Well, I guess it would be okay. If I don’t see you right off, just wave at me.”

“Great! I’m looking forward to tomorrow night then!”

Terri hung up with a wry smile. “I’ve just made a date with someone I can’t remember. I met so many people at work this week, and it does seem there was a Dave among them, but no face comes to mind.”

She sighed, continuing her monologue as she turned off the TV and headed for her bedroom. “I agreed to the date because I’m bored and lonely—the new “girl” in a new job in a new town. I just hope I haven’t hooked up with a masher or something! He sounded normal anyway.”

Terri spent the next afternoon wondering and worrying, while she got ready. Should I wear my black slacks and gold shimmery top with black beads or my turquoise skirt and matching blouse with the turquoise earrings? Should I spritz on some cologne or forgo it in case he’s allergic to scents? And how should I do my hair?”

After changing her mind three times about her outfit, dabbing on just a tiny bit of perfume, and letting her hair curl softly about her shoulders, she was finally dressed.

She arrived at the restaurant ten minutes early and scanned the room, but no blue shirt and tan slacks were in sight. She decided to wait in the restroom until 8:00, so she wouldn’t appear too anxious when he came in. Looking at herself in the mirror over the sink, she touched up her lipstick with hands that shook slightly.

Back in the dining area, Terri grabbed a menu, so she’d appear inconspicuous as she again searched the room. Yep! Blue and tan! I bet that’s him at the corner table by the window!

Taking a step in his direction, she looked up to see another man similarly attired come out of the men’s room and sit down nearby.

Terri panicked. Here’s a dilemma. Which is mine? One guy has a light blue shirt on, and the other’s wearing royal blue. Why wasn’t Dave more specific about the color? She groaned. Neither seems to have noticed me. I guess it’ll have to be trial and error!

She walked hesitantly up to Mr. Royal Blue and smiled, “Hi, I’m Terri!”

Startled, he glanced up with a puzzled look. “Hi.”

“Um, are you Dave?”

“No, I’m not. Sorry.”

Terri felt her cheeks flame as she muttered, “Excuse me, please,” and hurried away.

Okay, it’s got to be Mr. Light Blue! Here goes; but for the record, I am NEVER making a blind date again!

“Dave?” she questioned as she reached his table.

“Yes, may I help you?”

“I…I’m Terri.” She held out her hand as he stood up.

“You’re who?”

“Terri. You called and asked me to dessert.”

“I did? What’s your phone number?’

“372-0114”

He took a piece of paper from his wallet and studied it, then laughed. “I thought I called a woman at 372-0124. We were introduced at church last week.”

Terri stared at him, horrified. This can’t be happening!

“Please, sit down,” he invited. “Let’s not let a little mix-up spoil our dessert! If you leave, I’ll have to eat alone, and that’d be no fun!”

**********

Three days later, her phone rang again and the voice on the line said, “Terri? It’s Dave. How’d you like to meet for dinner at Applebee’s tomorrow night? I had lunch with the “church lady,” but we didn’t “click” like you and I did. What do you say?”

“I’d say you’ve got the right number now!”


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Christine Dunn04/27/07
Yes -that definately wasn't just a coincidence!
Cathy Kane04/27/07
Great piece. Fun to read. Very well done. Good job.
Julie Arduini04/28/07
Love found at Applebees! Great! I think one part where she was talking to herself was in quotes and the next in italics, I'm not sure if that is the way to do it, I'm definitely not strong in grammar. This was a neat read and kept the mystery for sure!
Verna Cole Mitchell 04/28/07
This was a fun story--well plotted!
LaNaye Perkins04/29/07
I love the the way this wrong number turned out right! Well Done!
Loren T. Lowery05/01/07
This made me smile more than once - with your writing style, I could see it all happening and feel the MC's thoughts and emotions - possiblly because we've all been there at one time or another.

I like the way you brought it to a conclusion as well - desert first and then dinner - interesting and possilbly even profound : )
Cheri Hardaway 05/01/07
So the first thing I thought about when I saw the title was the old game that was popular when I was a youngster -- now I'm showing my age!

I loved how this romance developed! I figured it was a case of mistaken identity, but couldn't wait to see how it turned out.

I met my husband on a blind date -- we've been married now for 23 years.

Nice work, Cheri
Cassie Memmer05/02/07
This is a delightful, fun read. I would have rather not known that he'd taken out the other woman. It's kind of a negative in an otherwise very positive, upbeat story. But I really enjoyed it. A very 'playful,'cheerful, and optimistic story. Good writing! Leaves the reader with a good feeling!
Joanne Sher 05/02/07
So creative - and wonderful dialogue. Enjoyed this very much!
Jacquelyn Horne05/02/07
cute approach to romance. Well, they've met, now I want to hear more. Good job.
Sara Harricharan 05/02/07
Love the mystery date! Guess Dave didn't make a mistake after all. I wish there'd been a little bit more at the end instead of her rushing around to get ready, but that's just me, I think. I loved the end best of all. Great job! ^_^
Sara Harricharan 05/03/07
***CONGRATS!***
Loren T. Lowery05/03/07
Wow, Myrna! What can I say, but this is wonderful! Congratulations on your fine writing! : )
Sharlyn Guthrie05/03/07
I'm so glad you placed in EC! This was a clever, fun story to read, and I did my best as a judge to see that it got the recognition it deserved.
Mo 05/03/07
Cute story! Congrats on your win.
Linda Germain 05/03/07
I guess for a goofy moment I forgot the genre was romance, since the first thing I thought was he would get her out of the house and then break in while she was gone. (How jaded is that? LOL) Cute story.This actually happened to me once with a wrong number, but he turned out to be icky (not the breaking in part). :0) Congratulations on a well-deserved win. LG~
Delia Latham05/08/07
ROFL - This is too cute! Love it. Very well-written, too!

Congratulations on placing 2nd!