The Official Writing Challenge
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04/29/07
This one was very dear to my heart, as I have a daughter with mobility problems who wondered at one time if anyone would fall for her.

A few minor grammar problems: a misplaced modifier and a tense shift--no big deal.

I like the open-ended ending, full of hope. Quite lovely and satisfying.
04/29/07
Very nice romance story -- I really hope the boy gets the girl.

I did notice a few tense changes throughout -- easy enough to correct.

Well done.
04/29/07
Good descriptions of the characters and their actions. Sweet romance in the making!
Beauty is in the eye of the beholder. I liked this. Good writing.
05/02/07
I like the promise in this piece. Left me wanting to know what would happen next. Nice work. Cheri
05/02/07
There is more to the story here for sure. This was well written no frill romance.
05/02/07
If not for a few speedbumps that can be easily fixed this is a wonderful story. I loved the heart of it. Great job. God bless.