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04/26/07
Ahhh - the heart of true romance. Sweet! Well done.
Fantastic description in this piece. It's very sweet, too. Well done.
04/26/07
NICE.
04/26/07
Well done! I'd better turn on the air conditioning. Is it hot in here? You built the tension up very well and your descriptions are fantastic.
04/27/07
Best piece I've seen on any level. Absolutely outstanding descriptions and just enough dialogue.
04/27/07
Awww...this is so sweet. Makes me feel all warm and fuzzy. :)
04/28/07
Really nice romance story. I felt the tension in the car, and I'm so glad he finally declared his love for her.

One minor correction -- it's 'lightning' rather than 'lightening'.
Sweet romance with great descriptions!
04/29/07
I think you've snapped up a winning ticket with this one - you managed to take the golden rule of just one moment in time and leading us through every second of it with breathtaking reality.
05/01/07
How sweet! How romantic! I really enjoyed this story and thought you built up very well to the climax. I love the kissing part! :)
05/01/07
So sweet! What a cute title too. I'm so glad he finally told her he loved her. ^_^