The Official Writing Challenge
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04/28/07
Your writing is good and enjoyable to read -- but the storyline left me empty. I would have liked to see them spend more than 1 minute together.

You developed the characters well, and I was looking forward to seeing more of their initial reactions to each other. (I especially liked the observation about the sparse hair.)
04/29/07
Nice character development and creative way to create a romance!
Just a quick look at a budding romance here. The end leaves a lot of room for imagination. The plot could go on, and on. Good job.
05/01/07
I like this--it's got a mellow, melancholy tone mixed in with the hope. Quite a commentary on our current age. You told exactly the right amount of story for the word limit. Very nice.
05/02/07
I enjoyed this, "Love,Internet Style." Great title, and this certainly seems to be the order of the day! Talk about "Modern Romance."
05/02/07
Nice story. I was afraid when the phone call came that it was the old ploy to get out of a blind date. You fooled me! :o) Many people live lives of hope these days waiting for a good relationship and many use the internet to achieve that purpose. So this is very contemporary and true to life. Nice writing!
I like the today feel of this piece. I'm not quite sure what to think of Ian. You did a fantastic job of making this reader give him some more thought. I'm not sure he's ready for a relationship. This was well done.
05/02/07
I liked this 'internet love story.' Very different and well done. I liked the description of Ian's eyes best. ^_^ I wish there'd been more though.
I enjoyed your writing sytle and you seemed to have your pulse on the new dating scene - You made the MC's emotions very real for me.
05/02/07
It's like reading a book with the last chapter torn out. What happened? I would have liked to have more story, but that is how it goes with only 750 words. Blessings, Cheri
05/02/07
I want to add that my comment above was meant to be a positive one. It's the mark of good writing to be able to have your reader connect to your characters to the point that they want to know more, in such a limited amount of words. ;o) Cheri