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04/19/07
Hee hee, hopefully she doesn't work the promotions department for the park system! This was good, a little lengthy at times in paragraph but I realize you needed to include all the camping items necessary to scare Beth off! Good work.
04/19/07
I loved this. I don't think I would enjoy camping as much as I do if I had met your MC before my first trip.
The paragraphs with the lists were long and effective. Great job.
04/20/07
I really enjoyed this story! Very comical and oh,so true! it's no wonder camping out as been on the decline for the last two decades
04/21/07
Mrs. Hinkel is delightfully drawn. If I were going camping, she could talke me out of it, too!
04/23/07
I like this! :) Good job! Quite entertaining... Mrs. Hinkle reminds me of Fancy Skinner in the Mitford books... the way she just goes on and on... hehe
04/24/07
What's really funny about this is that it's all too true! You've framed it all in a very humurous way.
04/25/07
ROFL -as another life-long camper....I'd find that a bit intimidating, if I didn't know better ;) Too much fun.
04/25/07
Phew! I think I'd cancel too. Loved the way the story ended and the way your POV character was clueless. *blush* I tended to skip over the second list in as desire to get on with the story.
04/27/07
Beth and Mrs. Hinkel are perfect characters for your story. Amazing how you make them come to life in just this solitary conversation. Mrs. H. would be a great help for a church short-term mission group, helping them prepare! I doubt she missed a thing, for any possible scenario. ^_^ Great entry!