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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 3 – Advanced)
Topic: Write in the HUMOR genre (04/12/07)

TITLE: The Last Laugh
By Catrina Bradley
04/19/07


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“Here here, now, no pushing. And you two! No cutting, wait your turn.”

Noah’s deep baritone echoed above the raucous squeaks, shrieks, squawks, and growls of the animals lined up in pairs. The crowd who had gathered to watch the town fool’s latest foolishness snickered at today’s spectacle.

“Now what’s he doing?”

“Startin’ a zoo. Or praps a circus? He’ll be needin’ to hire a clown, though. That sourpuss goodie-goodie twood ne’er make anyone laugh.”

“Ha! Right you are about No-No Noah. Maybe that boy of his, Ham, would make a good clown. I mean with a name like Ham…”

“If I didn’t know better, I would think those animals understood ‘im. Did ye see those two funny looking black and white bird-things walkin’ on two legs? Looked like they were tryin’ to hide behind the rhinos. When No-No shouted at ‘em, it ‘peered they hung their heads in shame. Then darned if they din’t waddle on back to their place in line.”

“Oh, the poor giraffe! Just banged his head on the doorjamb. Ouch, that must have hurt. I guess No-No doesn’t know everything; he didn’t make that door tall enough.”

The men were bellowing with laughter now as they continued to mock and jeer.

“Watch out, No-No, that lion is looking at the lamb with hunger in his eyes – better keep them separated!”

“I don’t see your mentor in line– you know, the dodo bird!”

“Hey, Noah, hope you’re packing a big scoop!”

“Yah, Noah, and you better get some flowers – that new-ark smell will be gone real soon.”

Noah was apparently unfazed by the comments from the peanut gallery; he didn’t even look their way. He calmly made another mark on his list as the elephants rumbled up the ramp and into the ark. Being ignored didn’t stop the crowd – it didn’t even slow them down. One after another they fired zingers at Noah.

The jackals were last in line, and Noah and his family followed them aboard and closed the doors behind them.

As the men made fun and laughed, drops of water began falling from the sky. This merely added to their amusement.

“Oo-oh, so this is what No-No was so afraid of. The biggest boat ever built - for this piddling bit of puddling.”

Soon, rain began to fall in earnest and, before they knew it, became a full-blown downpour. Waters began to overflow the banks of rivers and lakes all over the region and swirl at the feet, then ankles, of the men. Unable to gain admittance to Noah’s ark, they became despondent. When the water reached their calves, fear truly started to strike them. Nearby trees served as ladders out of the deep and they clung to the branches for their lives.

As the ark was lifted from its resting place on the earth by the rising waters, then set adrift, a high-pitched barking could be heard from behind its thick walls.

It appeared the hyenas were having the last laugh.


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Julie Arduini04/19/07
Excellent story! The part about the trees being ladders, great description. The dialogue/commentary, especially about Ham, and then the last line, just great!
Julie Arduini04/19/07
Excellent story! The part about the trees being ladders, great description. The dialogue/commentary, especially about Ham, and then the last line, just great!
Joanney Uthe04/19/07
Great story of Noah. Funny how he couldn't make anyone laugh, but they were laughing at him. The last line about the hyenas was my favorite.
Rhonda Clark 04/21/07
I like this take on Noah. Very different view. The hyenas made a very big point.
Verna Cole Mitchell 04/21/07
Exceptionally good description of how it might have been! You used humor really well.
Lynda Schultz 04/22/07
Great view of a familiar story. Good work.
william price04/23/07
I loved this version of the Noah story. I needed the joy it brought. Super writing to boot. God bless.
Marilyn Schnepp 04/23/07
A famous Bible Story retold with humor! How delightfully enjoyable and creative! Kept my eyes glued to the scene...non stop! Kudos!
Marty Wellington 04/24/07
Wow - a thoroughly enjoyable read. I loved it--great job!
Jacquelyn Horne04/25/07
I would imagine that this could very well be the truth of the story. I liked the hyenas getting the last laugh. Good writing.
dub W04/25/07
Enjoyable, Noah should be honored. :)
Jan Ackerson 04/25/07
I like the bit with the giraffe's poor head--and lots more. This was really clever.
Donna Emery04/25/07
Excellent story! I loved it, and could easily imagine the scene. Very nicely done.
Rita Garcia04/25/07
Creative take on Noah! Love it! LOL
Shari Armstrong 04/25/07
New ark smell! lol -I was hoping someone would take on a Noah story (there have been other funny ones done in the past). This joins the ranks :)
Betty Castleberry04/25/07
I like the creative spin you put on this familiar Bible story. There are many amusing lines in it. Well done.
Myrna Noyes04/25/07
I liked the name "No No Noah"! Very creative humor entry! The last line was my favorite,too! :) Good job!
Sara Harricharan 04/25/07
This is the best "Noah" story I've read yet. I love it! I really liked how you had the dialouge from the peanut gallery moving the story along, though in one place I wasn't sure if it was more than two people doing all the talking until the next paragraph. Overall though, very creative and fun! ^_^
Val Clark04/25/07
Very funny dialogue that moved the story along. Loved the play on words like No No Noah. The final line was a classic. Very creative.
joe hodson04/25/07
I loved your idea! Really creative. This was fun! I loved the remarks made by the spectators. The ending was great too, about the hyenas. Great job!