The Official Writing Challenge
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04/19/07
This is precious! The dialogue is exactly as you would expect a preschooler to speak. Their actions are just as accurate, and so are their hearts. Well done, this was a gem!
04/19/07
Your MC seems remarkable calm for the circumstance. I admire a woman who can stay calm at times of chaos. Dialogue and description were excellent.
04/21/07
Great job with the dialogue (but of course, you've heard it all before, haven't ya? ;) I enjoyed this so much - and I wish I could be this calm. Your ending is just perfect!
Excellent entry! The mother's patience exceeded mine in such circumstances. The children and their mischief were believable.
04/24/07
Terrific dialogue . . . this was a wonderful story. It moved right along and kept my attention throughout. Nicely done!
04/24/07
You brought back precious memories to this "Grandmother." Charming and fun read. LOL
I loved your story. You did a great job with your characters. The mom is very believable to me. I can see myself in the same situation, and it's always better to laugh than to cry.
What a day! But sooo loving.