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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 3 – Advanced)
Topic: Write in the HUMOR genre (04/12/07)

TITLE: Oh My, Oh Me, Oh Vanity!
By Verna Cole Mitchell
04/14/07


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I thought that I was dressed so fine
In my black satin shirt,
When Hubby whispered in my ear,
You need to zip your skirt.

So proud was I of my new shoes
With heels three inches high
Till one got knocked off at the curb;
Folks laughed as I limped by.

My hair Id combed in carefree curls,
Luxurious and full
Until the rain came suddenly
And glued them to my skull.

I walked ahead of everyone,
Impressive as could be,
And then I ran into a tree
That jumped in front of me.

While standing tall upon the stage,
I backed up to my seat,
But missed the chair, fell on the floor,
My misery complete.

So pleased with my new china cups,
I poured my guest some tea,
Then spilled the rest upon her dress,
Which so embarrassed me.

At special dinner with my spouse,
I ordered spaghetti.
I dropped it all into my lap,
And down the front of me.

So thrilled was I to sit up front
Inside the concert hall.
Alas! Out slipped an awful belch
That echoed off the wall.

While with some influential friends
I struck a haughty pose.
I took a drink of ice water
Which spewed out through my nose.


I opened up the Holy Book
And found these thoughts inside:
(And sad to sayIve found it true.)
Before a fall goes pride.

SCRIPTURE REFERENCE
Proverbs 16:18


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Julie Arduini04/20/07
I loved this. I'm not strong on poetry but it had a good feel to me, was an excellent lesson, and so visual I could see it all taking place. Great work!
Rita Garcia04/20/07
Laughing out loud, till the tears flowed. I enjoyed the build-up to a lesson that we can take to heart. You are a gifted writer indeed!
Joanne Sher 04/21/07
Oh, how I enjoyed this. A laugh in every stanza, and a wonderful lesson as well. I loved reading the first line of each stanza and trying to "guess" how it would end. Excellent job of juxtaposing the "glamour" with the ridiculous.
Lynda Schultz 04/21/07
A lesson to all of us for those moments when we think too highly of ourselves. Very funny, and oh, so true. Good work.
Joyce Samuel04/21/07
Oh this is very funny, although the rhythm is somewhat wobbly in some parts. I liked the link to the lesson on pride. Not bad.
Cheri Hardaway 04/22/07
What a good lesson in a fun setting! I enjoyed reading this little poem so much.

At first, I was trying to see it flowing sequentially in one big event, then decided it was several embarrassing things that happened on the character's journey from pride to humility.

The meter was a bit off in parts, but overall it was a delightful read with good rhyme scheme. Good work. Blessings, Cheri
terri tiffany04/23/07
Good visuals - I think it was very funny:)
Catrina Bradley 04/23/07
What a great illustration of a familiar verse. Too many similar things have happened to me - thanks for the laughs. :)
Jacquelyn Horne04/23/07
Good take on humor. Nice poem. True POV.
Erin Brannan04/24/07
Great... I loved the part about the tree jumping in front of you! Perfect ending as well!
Tabiatha Tallent04/24/07
Great job with the rhyme, the meter, and the humor.
Sandra Petersen 04/24/07
I enjoyed this series of poetic mishaps.

The one stanza about the spaghetti didn't seem to quite stay in rhythm with the rest.

The one stanza I got the biggest laugh from was:

"So thrilled was I to sit up front
Inside the concert hall.
Alas! Out slipped an awful belch
That echoed off the wall."

Great lesson in this poem. Thanks for giving me a chuckle.
Shari Armstrong 04/25/07
OH! loved it (and if I'd been her, would have avoided the spaghetti lol). Very nice lesson wrapped up in the laughs. You should be proud of this one ;)
Marty Wellington 04/25/07
Great visuals. Wonderful humor. I loved how you tied it into a Biblical passage. Bravo!
Ed VanDeMark04/25/07
Thanks for being human...oh so human...you sound like a fun person. You should meet my wife. Thanks Good Job.
Debbie OConnor04/25/07
Delightful! :)
Val Clark04/25/07
A poem that certainly resonates with me. Very visual with an ending that wraps it up and packs a punch. yeggy
Edy T Johnson 04/26/07
This is so delightful---I could almost feel the pain of embarrassment in every experience. The Bible tells us that God laughs. I imagine the foibles of the proud are a source of some amusement for our Heavenly Father! Thank you for fun reading.