The Official Writing Challenge
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04/12/07
Ooh, very suspenseful--and I love your descriptions. Excellent piece of writing.
04/12/07
Wow, I'm holding my breath! This was full of suspense but made me think--how many times have we came so close to evil but were spared. Wow again!
04/13/07
Loved this! Serious stuff tempered with touches of comedic relief reminds us how "the principalities of the air" do engage in battle, and how important PRAYER is in the resolution of that combat. Well done.
04/13/07
Bizarre and fascinating all at once. Some great phrases woven into this suspenseful piece. Well done!
04/13/07
Whoa! You grabbed hold of the reader and did not let go until the end. I had to take a minute to see if I could slow down afterwards. Very fast-paced. Suspense-filled and overall, just plain fun to read. ^_^
Still holding my breath! What a great read. I loved the end.
04/17/07
An engaging story. One minor note, however. Your similes shouldn't paint a visual image that is disparate from the current setting, such as from a dark room full of terror to a girl squeeling at a toad. The two images compare the emotion, but contrast the setting of that emotion.
Stupendous! Loved the way your verbs danced throughout the entire story.