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04/12/07
Very well done. The suspense just played up to what I felt was a very satisfying end. I liked the descriptions as they watched in the beginning.
04/13/07
Great characters, and a story that kept my attention.
Cool story. Love the cross!
04/13/07
This is wonderful. I'd love to see the cross.
This is a wonderful mystery. I loved the characters, the way you built up suspense, and the excellent ending.
Good writing here. Nice story. You sure needed more space to expound on this.
04/16/07
Great lead up to the final entrance, and then I'm a little mystified...funny? People dancing? He's happy? Yes, I'd say it's a Mystery story! Had me biting MY nails...and now I'm wondering? Nice job.
04/17/07
Terrific! I was there with him - good sequence of events and good ending - loved the tiny details that drew me into the characters.
04/17/07
WOW! Great story, love your characterization of the boys.
Having seen a few mysterious lights in our barns, this had my curiosity from the get go. Was not disappointed with the read, nor the outcome. You were able to hold a good deal of suspense in your words.
04/18/07
I love this mystery! It is great, funny, a sprinkle of suspense and with a wonderful, heartwarming finish! I love the character of Mike, he was my favorite. ^_^
04/18/07
Great job of characterization and suspense building. Enjoyed this!
04/20/07
What a fun mystery! Very nostalgic for me, with the barn and the whole atmosphere you created. Great job with the siblings' relationship, too. I was a little confused why the older brother called for help? But a good mystery with a touching ending (you could develop the ending into a larger story of its own!).