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04/12/07
I think this was pretty well-written. I had an idea of where it was going, but I think the word limit really limited how much suspense people can build. You did well!
04/13/07
Agreed. I was so hoping it really was a dog! :0) Well done.
04/13/07
Aww! Cute mystery! I love the character of Sabrina and especially glad that it turned out to be a dog and not a murder victim. ;) Nice work with the suspense though, I wish it'd been longer.
04/13/07
I really enjoyed this realistic story with good suspense! Many people jump to wrong conclusions, because they have some information about a situation, but are missing crucial pieces! I can easily see how Sabrina could have thought her dad had done Mr. Winthrop harm! Good job! :)
04/16/07
I was pulled along for sure - great suspense and I love the resolution!
04/16/07
Extremely clever, a full plot arc AND character devolopment in 750 words. Masterful!
04/16/07
You set up the mystery well pointing the reader in one direction while the real mystery was enacted and revealed. Well done. yeggy
04/16/07
I kinda guessed where this was going, too -- but I thought it was a surprise Easter rabbit they were struggling with rather than a dog. Even though I was pretty sure there was no real harm done to anyone, it was fun to see the story unfold.
04/16/07
The suspicious mind of the daughter was well protrayed, although the ending was predictable. Very cute story.
04/16/07
Very good. I liked it. I didn't guess a dog, but I enjoyed the ending. God bless.
Surprise! Surprise! I was certainly hoping it wasn't Mr. Winthrop. Good suspense.
04/16/07
Cute! I thought it might be an animal, but was expecting a fighting, scratching cat! Nicely written, I enjoyed reading it.
04/17/07
My kind of mystery! Great story! I loved the characterization of the young girls!
I loved how the misunderstanding turned into a good surprise. This was a very well told story.
04/17/07
Great suspense build up and one of those that could have ended very very well, or not. So glad it ended well!
04/18/07
Ooooohhh buddy that's good. I was riveted to the end.
Clever and convincing. The suspicions held by the children were age appropriate and made the story credible and fun to read.
04/18/07
Ah ha! Love the end, now we know why he wanted that fence fixed so badly! Great writing, great mystery.
Delightful story! I love the way you strung us along with the suspense!