The Official Writing Challenge
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04/12/07
Great idea for a story--this is one that could be elongated into a longer story or book. I think it would've been more potent if you showed the dialogue in real time instead of relaying it after the fact. Otherwise, good job.
04/12/07
Wow, this was a breath-stealer (I realized I was holding my breath as I reached the end of your taut story). Great job building suspense and pulling your reader into the terror!
04/13/07
This was absolutely engrossing and enrapturing. You had me completely at the edge of my seat. Amazing description.
04/14/07
I enjoyed it. I was frightened for your character.
04/14/07
This is one of the best mysteries I've read anywhere!
04/14/07
A true nail biter - now I need to get out my file! :) Very suspenseful and good descriptive writing set the scene - I like this line: "A wicked wind whipped her raincoat now, threatening to wrest it from her shivering form."
04/14/07
I was spellbound from the first paragraph! The suspense continued to intensify as the story unfolded. I especially loved your descriptions of the dark clouds smothering the sky and the wicked wind whipping Allegra's raincoat. Fantastic job!
04/14/07
Wow! Talk about a spine tingling, page turning, goose bumping Mystery! Double Wow!
Great one! Perfection personified. Just one Question however; Shouldn't "loosing his hold on her" be either "loosening" or "losing" his hold on her? Otherwise, fantastic Mystery story right on target! Terrific job!
04/14/07
Good mystery. Followed the genre well. Space was to short here to do it justice, but you gave it a superb try.
Good job.
04/17/07
Wow--all that and the dog too in 750 words! That was great reading! I'm in awe!!!
04/17/07
When I saw the title I thought of allergies...and then I read the story and wished I could go and buy the complete book. ^_^ This was really good, reminds me slightly of Agatha Christie-which were some of my favorite mystery novels. The last part with the scuffle could have used a few extra spaces to smooth over the time change from the woods to the hospital. Very well written though. Keep up the good stuff!
04/17/07
Wow. Yes, you are very gifted in suspense. You packed so much in, very well done.
04/18/07
Enjoyed reading this mystery - it was full of suspense and anticipation. Really liked the name of the dog: Barkley.
Your writing held my attention the whole read.