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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 3 – Advanced)
Topic: Write in the MYSTERY genre (04/05/07)

TITLE: The Whereabouts of the Two Trees in the Center of Eden
By TJ Nickel
04/06/07


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The Whereabouts of the Two Trees in the Center of Eden


Oh,
Where
did you put
the tree of life?
My God where did
you put it? Where did
you put the tree of knowledge
of good and evil; where is it? Are they
both in Eden still, and we simply cannot get in?
Or have you placed them into time, disguised in symbols
or
skin?

It
Seems
to me, that
they appeared,
yet Iíve looked all
around. It seems to
me, they once were here,
for what was lost was found.
Mysteries passed down through
time, sometimes need a razor. Occam,
help me find the trees, grant me a simple
favor. Question to answer a question, seems
quite fitting enough. How do two trees stand in one
center?

Doesnít
seem so tough.

How,
just how,
is that to help me,
solve this complex riddle?
All that helps me see, my guide,
is that both were in the middle. Wait,
thatís it!
Thank
you
mentor.
Impossible!
Having two trees in
one center! If thereís two,
side by side, both cannot be there.
Itís either or, canít be both. Wait, I must
take
care.


Sir
Occam,
I thank you,
but youíve led
my mind astray.
Scripture says both
were in the middle I will
not be your prey. Instead Iíll
pray unto the Lord, asking him for
rest. This mystery requires no answer
(of course).
Itís just an
ancillary quest.

Father,
Son, and
Holy Ghost,
Triune three in
one. If it be your
will, help me to see
how this was done. Two
trees - both in the center, doesnít
sound like two yet one. Surely one and
oneís still two, and itís not a matter of how
I
sum.

Hmm,
two trees
springing into
life on two sides
of one stream. The
groundís translucent;
wonderful, how beautiful,
what a scene! The first one
a mixture, seems to me, of apple,
cherry, and peach. The second is a
two-branched palm, its fruits way out
of
reach

The
tops, the
crowns, whatís
that one tree doing?
Yeah, the mix with the
fruit that blinks, like Christmas
tree lights, dull then bright, I can feel
it, the tree, the tree, it thinks! Its branches
are seizing that other one, whose fruit stays
bright as gold - reaching, grabbing, bringing it in,
the second tree now it beholds. Scraping, scratching,
ripping the trunk, bark is flying Ďround. Stop this, Lord!
At least close my ears, I cannot bear the sound, Watch out!
Oh no, its crown has arched, itís pierced through the otherís top,
A circle of blinking lights affixed, okay Lord, make it stop! A horrifying
crack (straight through two branches); those lights, their pace has quickened. Take
it easy, will you God? I didnít ask to become sickened. No! Enough, enough, enough, Lord!
No, no, not the roots.
Not another crack,
NOOOOOOOOOOO!
Itís dimmed the golden fruits.

Ok,
okay,
please stop
now, Lord. I get it,
thereís no need for showing.
The palm treeís fruits soon fade to
black, then a stab, then sap goes flowing.
I get it, I get it, please have mercy. I cannot bear a
second more. Iím sorry for what we did to you, the whole
thing
I abhor

I
Thank
you Lord,
for answering
my questions: how
two can also be one,
and how they both were
in the middle, oh, and for
everything youíve done. You
didnít have to be so violent, it makes
me fear to ask - but I must know, so please
be kind, and donít take me to task. Iím thankful
for these revelations, but thereís something else Iím
neediní. Can you just tell me where to find, those first two
trees
from
Eden?

Are
they both
in Eden still,
and we simply
cannot get in? Or
have you placed them
into time, disguised in symbols
or
skin?


Authorís note: Submitted on Good Friday, 2007.

The poem is suggesting that the Tree of Knowledge of Good and Evil is not only the cross Jesus was crucified on, but the Father as well; and that the Tree of Life is Jesus, his Son. (Triune God, two trees [here meaning Persons] and a stream [Spirit].)


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Jan Ackerson 04/12/07
Whew--a lot of work went into this! Super job on the formatting, and the embedded rhyme scheme. And since the mystery genre is primarily an intellectual exercise, you've certainly tapped into that criterion. I'll come back to this one, for sure.
Dolores Stohler04/12/07
What an awesome job you've done, not only composing the poem but putting it together like trees. And I like your explanation of the mystery, a deep one to be sure. Lots to think about here.
James Clem 04/12/07
Going out on a limb to say this was Extremely Creative!
Verna Cole Mitchell 04/14/07
This was extraordinary in its creativity, including formatting.
Leigh MacKelvey04/14/07
I would have never thought of a poem for a mystery genre, but you have done a brillant job with the use of a concrete poem and internal ryhming! Kudos!
Rita Garcia04/15/07
Wow, you made this fit the Challenge and the season! Great writing!
Marilyn Schnepp 04/15/07
What a beautiful picture designed with, by and from words, along with a fascinating and mysterious question; however, to para-phrase a sentence from Kilmer's poem Trees: "Poems are made by fools like me, but only God" can plant, transform, move, hide, transfer, transport, re-create, make and deliver a tree elsewhere. How's that for solving this creative Author's questions?
joe hodson04/16/07
Wow! Very creative and deep! I like the tree formations! Good job!
Catrina Bradley 04/16/07
You've added insight into a mystery I've been investigating for years. I've added this to my favorites. Awesome, awesome job. I add my kudos re the formatting too -
Cat.
Sara Harricharan 04/17/07
Wow! Some really creative formatting and writing here! I love this piece and the mystery is one that has 'tickled' my mind for some time, this is a nice twist with good flow and rhyme. ^_^ Excellent writing!
Joanne Sher 04/17/07
Soooo creative. I echo what everyone else said. Excellent.
Julie Arduini04/17/07
This was exceptionally well done all the way around!
Loren T. Lowery04/18/07
I'm at a los as to how you do this - they say poetry is the hightest form of writing - you've demonstrated that here by staying within the genre and using a visisual tool to empasise your mystery as well. Great job!