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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 3 – Advanced)
Topic: Music (03/08/07)

TITLE: My peace
By Melanie Kerr
03/15/07


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I will not call him
I will not speak out his name
And summon him to my side
I will not take the peace he offers

His lyre is in my hands now
I will play his songs
My fingers will pick out his melodies
But, elusive, I cannot hold them

This lyre sings for him
Why does it groan in my hand?
Soft notes sigh for him
For me they jangle and jar

His melodies usher in peace
He opens to door to stillness
His music comforts me
And my soul is restored

Without him
Anguish steals though the door
Comfort is absent
And distress overpowers me

I wrestle with the strings
There is only noise
No sweet songs
To lift my fallen spirit

Why must my peace
Rest in his hand?
Each time my heart betrays me
Falling under his spell

David, my servant, my son
He slays giants with a stone
He slays thousands with a sword
He slays demons with a harp

His name is on my lips
I shout, “Come quickly!”
And when he plays
My heart will find rest

I lay down his lyre
And grasp a spear
I will claim back my peace
Even with his blood


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Pat Guy 03/15/07
I wondered if anyone would write about this! This was done perfectly! I throughly enjoyed this take and it was the perfect genre. What I liked is that it inspired me to read it a second time after knowing who it was about - I loved this!
Elizabeth Baize 03/15/07
When I realized who was talking I wanted to start over and read it again as well. This is exceptional!
cindy yarger03/17/07
I liked this. I've not heard anyone take on Saul's perspective before. You did a good job of showing his torment.
Jan Ackerson 03/20/07
This is a masterpiece--great use of alliteration and repetition, and you absolutely expressed the hatred and jealousy in Saul's soul--and in so few, perfectly chosen words.
Verna Cole Mitchell 03/20/07
What a creative POV for music! You certainly had the "voice" for Saul. Excellent poem!
Linda Watson Owen03/21/07
Oh, wow! I just got it after having read it once before and being puzzled. I just had my 'Well, duh!' moment! LOL (I know, call me slow, you're absolutely right. ; ) This is really wonderful! You captured Saul's soul perfectly in this skillful and oh so creatively written poem, Mel. Bravo!!
Joanne Sher 03/21/07
So very powerful. Excellent in every way.
Sara Harricharan 03/21/07
Oooh, Masterful! I have to love this. It's so different and kind of haunting at the same time. The POV is great and I especially like the emotions it draws on. Awesome writing! ^_^
Julie Arduini03/21/07
This is Masters work for sure! Wonderful POV, gripping emotions. I especially loved the stanza about jangle and jars.
Donna Emery03/22/07
Very nice and very original. I enjoyed this and the poem flowed beautifully. Thanks for sharing it
Loren T. Lowery03/22/07
Congratulations on the lyrical message of this poem and your EC Placement.