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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 3 – Advanced)
Topic: Music (03/08/07)

TITLE: Blues
By Linda Watson Owen
03/15/07


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The blues
rolls its mournful, graveled voice,
there in the dust of Delta ways,
there on aí old board porch reachiní
through timeís forever.

In a drowsy land as low and dark
as blues itself,
a moan crawls slow
in its roll
onto summerís heavy breath.

A blue voice weaves,
and twines
through locust drone.

A blue voice floats

like smoke summoned to the riverís edge,
then nuzzles thick
into the father of rivers mighty mud.

A singer sways,
and groans,
and births a thousand years into
a song,
a thousand tears
into blue.

Wailiní
is the voice that yearns,

alone

in its night of thickening heat
and glistening sweat
on aí old board porch in the Delta.

Sing, blues,
sing,
and show all Godís children how to cry.

I say,

Sing, blues, and let your trouble song

float up

up high to Heavenís porch
on the banks of Sinless Sea.

Moan to the Father of Rivers,
and let Him hear your heart birthing
a thousand tears.

Blues.

Let your blues weave with the hue of Heaven
shining through,
shining through Godís buzz of star song.

The Father of Rivers embraces the blues,

when it carries you.


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Melanie Kerr 03/16/07
"A singer sways, and groans,
and births a thousand years into a song, a thousand tears
into blue."

I like the idea of songs coming from the heart and from people's life experiences. It reminded me of the Pslam that begins "By the rivers of Babylon".
Laurie Glass03/16/07
The Father of Rivers, I like that. And He'll listen to whatever we sing.
Verna Cole Mitchell 03/17/07
The rhythm of the blues is strongly felt all through this beautiful poem Great job!
Leigh MacKelvey03/18/07

The images written in a rhythm of a blues song made this poem touching and lovely to read. I like your line breaks, they added to the meaning and mood.
Pat Guy 03/19/07
I felt I was sitting on the pier on a Louisiana bank, listening to the blues rockin' on the porch. This was done most masterfully. I could feel this in my soul.
Jan Ackerson 03/19/07
Linda, as much as I love your charming rhymes, I think it's in free verse that you really shine. This is just PERFECT--every word chosen expertly to create a bluesy poem that just sings--and then delivers, just in the precisely perfect way. This is literary and intelligent, yet absolutely full of soul.
Myrna Noyes03/20/07
What an incredible "blues-y" mood this piece generates! The feel is slow, deep, and very rich! Excellent writing! :)
Joanne Sher 03/20/07
I love the voice that permeates this piece - and Jan is right, it is so clear that every word was chosen precisely and is perfectly placed.
Sara Harricharan 03/21/07
Really nice! I especially liked this part.

A blue voice weaves,
and twines
through locust drone.


Great job. ^_^
Julie Arduini03/21/07
I felt like I was in the Big Easy drinking up these precious, perfect words. Great!
Donna Emery03/21/07
Oh, so nice. This could be spoken while Coltrane plays. I loved it! Thanks for sharing it
Laurie Glass03/22/07
Congrats! You did it again!
Sara Harricharan 03/22/07
Congrats on the EC! ^_^
Loren T. Lowery03/22/07
Congrautulations on placing with this lyrical entry. Enjoyed the read.
Tabiatha Tallent03/22/07
I loved this! Definitely one of my favorites this week.
Marilyn Schnepp 03/24/07
Congratulations, Linda! I love the Blues, anytime, anywhere! Seems to tell it like it is; from down deep inside, it wails & moans the depth of misery, of lost love and rejection. Topnotch choice of music for your challenge...and you did it up proud.
Mariane Holbrook05/07/08
Oh, Linda, free verse is indeed your forte. You write it so effortlessly, and it is as fluid and easy to read as molasses slowly pouring out onto a checkered oil cloth in a country kitchen in the delta. How exquisite! This must have been quite a read! How I would love to have heard it! I wish you had taped it!
Verna Cole Mitchell 05/08/08
Just had to read it again to say--You're the best at free verse of anyone!