The Official Writing Challenge
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03/15/07
Your intriguing title captured my attention, and your first sentences made me want to read more! (I did notice a few "mechanical" errors, though.) The story itself was well-written and imaginative, and I loved the ending where Jesus unlocked this hideous prison of death by His sacrifice! Good job!
03/16/07
This story haunted me. Very creative, writing from a demon (Satan's?) point of view. I liked the terse sentences that built suspense and lent a tone of anguish, as well as the creative phrasing. My favorite phrase: "A reverse darkness." Wonderful portrayal of paradox here!

The unusual title also sparked my curiosity--I had to find out who, or what, "Tetelestai" was!
03/16/07
Amazing description. You drew me in and kept me here from beginning to end. Love the end! :)
03/16/07
Oh I liked this! So often we see the angels perspective on momentous events but to see it from hell, very creative and haunting. Strong writing, great job!
03/16/07
Bravo! This is one of my favorites. Excellent writing!
03/17/07
Nice take on the subject. Some good word usage here. I esp. liked "A reverse of darkness." Creative. Good job.
03/17/07
perfect for the upcoming season. This is intense and amazing all of the same time. You captured me from the first word.
03/19/07
I liked the concept of this piece and the forboding musical overtones. Good job!
03/19/07
Oh, wow! Oh, wow! My favorite of yours, by far, and definitely at the top of my list for this week. So creative and original, and your word choices were simply outstanding.
03/20/07
Your descriptions were powerful, and what an awesome message you illustrated!
03/20/07
Very impacting story.
Pat Guy  
03/21/07
Bravo! Absolutely Bravo! My favorite of yours also. THIS is what you write. Wow!
03/21/07
You've outdone yourself with this piece! I have never quite "seen it" like I have when reading this. I could feel, hear, touch and smell the despair and pain. So vivid and realistic descriptions, you did a great job with making me love to hate the one responsible and then the taste of a faint victory with "Tetelestai". I loved how you tied the title in with this. ^_^
03/21/07
I hope you plan to expand this! The short sentence length was a great decision that made it all the more intense. I really enjoyed this piece.
03/21/07
Very good job - definitely one of my favorites. Very creative and original.
03/21/07
Excellent, Sue! I can only guess what the word means, but I was glad of its implications. Wonderfully descriptive and I enjoyed reading it. Thanks for sharing it
03/21/07
The mood you wove in this creative piece is so thick and 'real' that I can taste it. And what an unusual yet 'right on' choice of story for this topic! Way to go, Sue!
03/21/07
Take a bow. This is wonderful. I love the creativity and the message. Big thumbs up!
03/21/07
Very creative POV! I liked the part about the demons that went into the pigs and the part about Jesus being ont he wrong side of the chasm. Great writing.
03/22/07
Wow, Sue. I noticed your comment on the Message Boards and just read this now. Really sorry not to see it in EC, because this is GREAT - one of your best.
03/22/07
Sue, I just read your commentary on the message board. As I read this wonderful accounting the tears poured! How gifted you are, and it is evident that He abundantly blesses your hand as you write!
05/09/07
Apologies for contacting you this way but we need your bio note please for the Faithwriters book "Hidden in the Hymns". Can you please contact me?