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03/15/07
Delightful narrative! The poem sings. I really enjoyed it.
03/15/07
Delightful narrative! The poem sings. I really enjoyed it.
03/15/07
Delightful narrative! The poem sings. I really enjoyed it.
03/15/07
Delightful narrative! The poem sings. I really enjoyed it.
03/15/07
Delightful narrative! The poem sings. I really enjoyed it.
03/15/07
This was sweet - like apple pie! Great job.
03/16/07
Oh! I luv, luv, luv it! What a delightful story in verse! It's a "WOW" in my book!!

03/16/07
Great title and such an endearing story.
03/16/07
Cute, sweet and delightful. To keep the meter beat I'd suggest using "upon my face" in next to last verse...but most of poem has meter in sync. Nice job.
03/17/07
I really liked this! I don't usually stick with long poems, but this one caught me! Good job.
03/18/07
I loved this! I could easily imagine this wonderful character and his sweet lady. Very enjoyable!
03/19/07
Wonderful. Reminds me of one of the story lines in the musical, Oklahoma.

One of my favorite stanzas was why he sat in front of her in church - afraid he couldn't take his eyes off her and not hear what the preacher was saying. Been there myself. : )
03/19/07
I love this, Laurie! Perfect dialect, and adorable story, with a narrator impossible not to love.
03/19/07
Sweet poem! What a fun one to read!
Pat Guy  
03/19/07
You took me through a whole gambit of emotions! This has it all - just everything. I wanted him to hurry up! You have a gift dear Laurie! LOVED your "Story Poetry."
03/19/07
Great job with the voice and taking through the different stages of the romance.
03/19/07
Touching, cute, fun...maybe also "inspiring" in a clean, simple, truthful sort of way. Loved seeing inside this man and finding a tender heart there. :-)

Nice flow and rhyme, as usual!
03/20/07
Just lovely and sweet! I love the voice. Great title too!
03/21/07
Cute and fun! I like Emma Jean she sounds like a lovely person to know. Seeing her through Clarence's eyes was certainly a treat. ^_^
03/21/07
What a wonderful story told by this well-written poem! It grabbed and held my interest to the last word! Your dialect was great, and you just gotta love that Clarence! :)