The Official Writing Challenge
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03/08/07
I loved this story! The descriptions, especially of the elderly lady and the compassionate thoughts of the narrator observing her, made both main characters come alive for me. So did the dialogue. I felt as though I were right in that grocery line! Beautiful, moving message too--and the unusual title instantly grabbed me. Great job!
03/09/07
Great story! I loved the narrator's thoughts as he observed the lady, and the little details that made the story (apples, cheese). Definately an eye-catching title.
03/09/07
Great story! I loved the narrator's thoughts as he observed the lady, and the little details that made the story (apples, cheese). Definately an eye-catching title.
03/11/07
Tears in the eyes of the old lady and cashier - and now me! Yes indeed, a Sermon right from the throne of God; and I loved it from beginning to end, keeping my interest throughout. This 10 second sermon in a supermarket beats many an hour long sermon in a Church! Kudos!!
Very good story of the love of God being manifested. One thing, I would introduce the children earlier in the piece. (They might be fidgeting by his side or something). I assume that they were there by the last lines, but it isn't clear to me. But this really was a GREAT piece.
03/12/07
Very good. A refreshing read and well written.
Perfect! I really enjoyed this read as it brought back some good and fond memories.
03/13/07
A very well told story of hope and compassion. I especially love the last line.
03/14/07
Excellent message wonderfully shared. Great description and detail. I felt like I was right there.
03/15/07
This was such a sweet story that so tugged at my heart. It’s the little things we can do for others that can make such a difference. Loved the story. Thanks for sharing.