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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 3 – Advanced)
Topic: Shopping (03/01/07)

TITLE: Shopping Expert, Fabulous Friend
By Sharlyn Guthrie
03/05/07


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Her husband is a softball star;
one son plays basketball.
Baseball is the others’ game;
her girl loves volleyball.
My friend is not an athlete
but she outlasts them all
in the venue of her choosing—
the local shopping mall.

A funny, smart, and perky gal,
she wears size six petite,
tracking sales and fashion trends,
cute sneakers on her feet.
She sifts through bargain tables
unwilling to retreat
‘til she proclaims her victory,
waving a sales receipt.

She’s thrifty and she’s practical,
savvy about textiles.
Scouring fashion magazines
she learns the latest styles.
She’s memorized store layouts,
arrangement of the aisles,
and routes to stores and outlet malls
within three hundred miles.

Her shopping is methodical,
not careless or slipshod.
Those who dare accompany her
observe amazed and awed.
Shoppers half her age give up,
exhausted and slack-jawed;
her stamina and strategy
they reverently applaud.

I’ve been under her tutelage
For twenty-something years—
shopped for nearly everything
from soup to black brassieres.
Managers know her by name,
and so do most cashiers.
I have seen her wit and prowess
reduce grown men to tears.

Don’t think her superficial,
her profundity I’ll plead;
kind-hearted, loving, faithful
and virtuous indeed.
She isn’t moved by money
or galvanized by greed.
She’d give the Ricci off her back
to help someone in need.

Sometimes we plan a shopping day,
sometimes a whole weekend,
I seek her sound advisement;
ask what she’d recommend.
On her candid opinions
I cheerfully depend.
No person knows me better than
my boutique loving friend.

The bonding that has taken place
as we’ve trekked sale to sale
could only have occurred on
the turf they call “retail.”
It underlies our zest and
attention to detail.
No doubt it’s aided by the fact
that we are both female.

Through happy times and difficult
we’ve watched our friendship bloom.
We’ve shared our deepest secrets,
and food we can’t consume.
We’ve swapped our kids and coupons
and tried on French perfume.
We’ve laughed so hard we had to run
to find the Ladies’ room.

Frugality describes my friend;
she’s also very smart.
She has refined her hobby
to something of an art.
Only things of quality
are placed into her cart.
I’m honored that she found a place
for me within her heart.


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Bonnie Way03/09/07
Great poem! I really like the personality you capture here.
Marilyn Schnepp 03/11/07
A bit long for my short attention span; however, it was a great poem and flowed beautifully after I got past the first verse...which I felt was a bit off meter. Nice Job! And great tribute to a Shopping Friend. Very creative, on target topic-wise and shows great poetic talent!
Jacquelyn Horne03/12/07
Such a sweet rendition of friendship. Very well written. The last stanza was the best. A great ending.
Jan Ackerson 03/12/07
This is very good, and I really liked the clever rhymes in the 4th and 5th stanzas.
Jen Davis03/13/07
How very sweet! And if this is true, what a wonderful tribute to your friend. I would love to see a revised edition of this with fewer details so that it could relate to more friendships. I think this has great potential.
Cassie Memmer03/14/07
This is so cute! I hope your friend enjoys it. Keep up the great work!
Joanne Sher 03/14/07
This is absolutely delightful! Such a warm, wonderful tribute. I hope you send this to her! Love all the little details - definitely made the piece!
Catrina Bradley 03/15/07
I think I know your friend. She comes home with a van-load of bags and tells her husband, "Wait till you hear how much money I saved today!" :) Nice job, I enjoyed your tribute.
Julie Arduini03/15/07
This got better and better as I read along. A wonderful tribute!