The Official Writing Challenge
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03/12/07
I read this and I almost didn't comment because at first reading I didn't like it. The writing itself is good but it seemed empty. I thought about that and wondered just how many people shop exactly like that. How many people are dissatisfied with what they do purchase, long for more and are ultimately still looking for the wrong things (poise, beauty, and confidence)? Now I like your story and think that you did a great job in expressing it.
03/13/07
Oh my! Have you been shopping with me? I thought I heard a voice. (hint: I watched Stranger that Fiction last night. LOL) But honestly, this is exactly why I DON'T go to the mall if I can help it. Wonderful emotions!
03/15/07
You made a good point with this story. I could most relate to this line: ďÖI hate buying things that I later donít wear because I decide too late that I donít like them.Ē I hate that too, and Iím not sure how that happens. I love the ending to this story. It ends abruptly and perfectly. Great job!