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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 3 – Advanced)
Topic: Sewing (02/22/07)

TITLE: The Gift
By Terry R A Eissfeldt
02/27/07


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Morning came. The first morning of our imprisonment. Today would reveal weather we lived or died. It was all up to me. Me and Mama and God.

Papa had traveled to Canada with his brothers. He was to send for us. We were to have a new start in life. We were to leave Volhynia behind, leave Russia behind. We were to be free to live as Germans without the sideways glances and suspicions. But instead of sending for us, Papa returned.

“They treated me like a nobody!” he told Mama. “Me! I am an important man here. I am the master blacksmith. We have a big house, servants, nice things. You don’t want to go to a dusty little town in the middle of nowhere, do you?”

“But things aren’t safe here anymore for us,” Mama argued. “All Germans are considered spies.”

“Nonsense. My family has been here for close to 70 years. We are respected.” He puffed out his chest. “We stay.” That was the end of it.

Without warning the police came. We were prodded into cattle cars with all other remaining Germans from the area. The train climbed out of the Sluch River valley and headed north. Before we reached Siberia, the final destination, Mama was dead.

When the train finally stopped and we arrived at the Farm, the men were separated from the women and children. All skilled men were commanded to step forward. Next, the women and children belonging to each man was told to present themselves. Lotty took my hand and pulled me.

“Whose daughters are these?” The guard barked.

“Mine,” Papa replied softly. For the first time in my life Papa was not in charge. He kept his eyes to the ground.

“You are a master smith. You are useful. What skills do your daughters possess?”

“Lotty, the oldest, is twelve. She is good in the kitchen.” It was true. Even though we had cooks and cooks helpers, Lotty was always wanting to be in the kitchen.

“Paulina, my youngest, is ten. She can sew.” He looked at me hard. It was enough to stop the protest from my mouth but my eyes were questioning, denying. I had never picked up a needle or thread in my young life.

“If this is true, you will live in the servants quarters of the main house instead of the barracks. If it is not, you will all be shot as the German spies that you are.”

We were led to the main farm house. It was huge. Bigger than the house we left behind. Once inside, the warmth nearly knocked me over. We were shown to our meagre room.

“Papa, I don’t know how to sew. What am I going to do?” I cried into his strong arms.

“Don’t worry, little one. We will pray. God will look after all the details.”

Sleep finally came to my exhausted body and with it a dream entered my troubled mind. It was Mama.

“Paulina, I’m going to teach you to sew. You will be a gifted seamstress. All will be well. Papa, Lotty and you will eventually be freed. You will go to Canada. Remember me and use your sewing as a blessing to others.”

I have told no one of the dream. It is too unreal, even for my child’s mind.

I am brought to the head seamstress. She gives me some mending to do. The needle and thread do not feel foreign to my tiny hands. I make fine, even stitches. Each project I am given I accomplish. I have the gift. We will not die today.

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Eventually we were freed. We did make it to Canada. Papa was a humbled man. We were grateful for our freedom and for whatever blessings came our way. As for sewing, yes, I continued with the gift I was given. Many people were blessed because of the miracle I received.


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Allison Egley 03/03/07
Oh, I love this story. Remember that all numbers under 100 should be spelled out. Also, try to stay away from passive voice, and be aware of tense, as there was an awkward shift towards the end. This is a great story and concept, and I'd love to see it reworked and expanded.
Bob Zoellner03/04/07
Nicely told. I was able to mentally see the different scenes you portrayed. Good job!
Sharlyn Guthrie 03/04/07
How frightening for a ten year old! I thought that you used the topic creatively in this story.
Julie Arduini03/04/07
This was a moving story that had my full attention beginning to end. You are a good story teller. Keep at it!
Jacquelyn Horne03/05/07
Thought provoking story. God always comes through.
cindy yarger03/07/07
WOW - very good.
Jan Ackerson 03/07/07
Excellent story, and very inspiring. I almost think it'd be more effective ending at "We will not die today." That's where the POW is. Be careful of weather / whether.

This held me spellbound...nice job.
Verna Cole Mitchell 03/07/07
What a wonderful story--so well told. I was so eager for them to be safe. Good job!
Joanne Sher 03/07/07
A wonderful telling of a moving story. I was engrossed from beginning to end.
Donna Emery03/07/07
This truly touched my heart and I can only imagine how she felt when she learned to sew. Our Lord has perfect timing. Thanks for sharing this
Catrina Bradley 03/07/07
This is very well told - I could hear a Russian immigrant speaking the words of your MC. Knowing it is true story awes me. God is SOO good! I noticed some tense shifts - watch out for that. Otherwise, good job!
Sheri Gordon03/07/07
This held my attention from beginning to end. I think you could have stopped short of the last paragraph -- that would have been a powerful ending. The rest was nice to know, but climax to the drama came earlier. Thanks for sharing this wonderful story.


   
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